This is the first episode in my new series. Hope you like it and enjoy!
About this creation
Mace Windu has been sent to inspect the new Clone Commanders work at succeeding at taking a seperatist base. They have a plan to do something dagerous, but will it succeed........
Master Windu's attack shuttle lands at the base.
Tyran: "Welcome master Windu. Are we still on for the plan?"
Windu: "Yes we are. Wait for my singnal."
Windu: "Do you hear that? Get down!!!"
Master Windu push's Tyran out of the way as the shuttle explodes.
Tyran: "Thanks General."
Windu: "Oh, no problem...." he says as he catch's his breath.
Tyran: "That wasn't part of the plan."
Windu: "We can still pull it off."
Tyran: "If you say so."
A trooper walks out of the wrekage.
Trooper: "Is there more survivers!?!"
Master Windu uses the force to move the cockpit out of the way.
Windu: "You alright Lutenient?"
Trooper: "Ya. Behind you! Clankers!"
Clanker: "We've got you out numbered!"
Tyran: "Well, did you not see the Jedi! We are more powerful than stupid clankers!"
Clanker: "We still out number you! We are more powerful. I think."
Ventress appears and shoves the cockpit on top of the trooper.
Trooper: "Ahhh!!! Help.... me!!!"
Ventress: "The droid was right. Lay down your weapons or prepare to die."
Windu: "We surrender Ventress."
Tyran and Windu put down their weapons.
Ventress: "Take them away!"
Droid Sniper: "Sir, what do we do with the injured one?"
Ventress: "Kill him."
Trooper: "NO!!!"
Sniper: "Ready, aim....."
Windu: "Now Tyran, NOW!!!"
Tyran attacks a droid, taking his blaster.
Tryan shoots a droid and Windu shoves the SBD in to the other three droids.
Tyran: "We have you out numbered! Stand down and surrender!!!"
Ventress: "You fool!"
Obi-Wan: "Tyran is right ventress."
Ventress: "What!"
Commander Cody, Fox, Plo-Koon, Ahsoka, Skywalker, and Obi-Wan show up.
Obi-Wan: "You have no choice Ventress. More forces are on there way."
Good work here! I would say that enviroment could be a bit less coloured and darker (I mean like gray and brown colours) Comic is really good, want to see more! : D
I like it
Andrew AKA Hump-Free
April 10, 2011
Very Nice Comic, Couldn't Tell That It Was Your First.
You've done a lot of work with a limited amount of background so points there. Not bad on the story either. For your next one, try to build a little more background if you can. Great start so far. ~ Chris.
Nice first episode! Usually the first episode reaches out and pulls the viewer. This pulled me past the point of no return. (The point of no return thing is a song in The Phantom of the Opera.) Could we be friends? I also have a Clone Wars comic can you check it out?
Th scenery is great, but I don't like your overuse of Jedi and the concept that Clones are capable of mowing down legions of droids with no problem. The storyline can use some restructuring
This is very impressive. The amount of details is great! I like how you have the tweleve on the ground. as far as the commander name goes I think the one you have would be perfect or mabey someone elses names would fit nicely. frankly I can't think of any. weird huh. Oh well great job anyways. ~EARCTF
This is great! I love reading other peoples comics!
I like it
CC-7576 "Rex"
January 16, 2009
If you want to keep the name just keep it, it´s your name, by the way it is everytimes such a high honorar for me when someone says that I´m his favorite builder. Thanks man. To C Rex: If your name is to long itz gets a short form at e.g. look at the main page and slook at my Fallout 3, you will read: "Fallout 3 Vignette by C "Rex" ", you can see C is the first letter of CC-7576 and "Rex" is the last part of my name, so if we see that in that way you are C "Rex", too. lol P.S.: Has 2412 to do with christmas? You know german date 24.12. .
Oh, I saw your comment on Project Awesome Part 3. The peice that I used for the 3 guns is used in the MTT's droideka. It holds the legs on it. If that isn't helpful, I'll get you a picture when I'm feeling better.
I like all the green. And on your accounts picture, the one with the battle droid pointing forward, I have an account on another website unrelated to this one with that same picture. Well, it is a good picture.
