MOCpages : Share your LEGO® creations
LEGO models my own creation MOCpages toys shop AoT Round 2 Comic Entry: Armies of the PastBattles and dioramas
Welcome to the world's greatest LEGO fan community!
Explore cool creations, share your own, and have lots of fun together.  ~  It's all free!
AoT Round 2 Comic Entry: Armies of the Past
>>>>>>>>>>UPLOADED 7:47 PM<<<<<<<<<< Also I HIGHLY suggest zooming in on most pics.
About this creation
Armies of the Past

The time is after the Battle of Endor. Rave Allor, former Rebel, has commandeered an Imperial Venator-class Star Destroyer, naming it "Rave's Parry," and now fights to wipe out the Imperial Remnant.

Rave has been on a private mission on Naboo. He is returning to his Venator, which is currently orbiting Naboo's moon Ohma D'un. In the past couple years, he's been focused only on Imperial Remnant activity, which is scarce as it is.

The Venator-class sits peacefully. Too peaceful, maybe? As Rave flies towards it, an eerie sense overcomes him, one that makes him feel he's entering a trap....



*The Venator sits quietly in space*



*Rave contacts the Venator*
:: Rave to P327, open the docking bay. ::*



Rave becomes uneasy*
:: P327, do you copy?…… P327? ::



*The docking bay opens*
"That's weird… no response from P3."



"Hope everything is alright……"



SCENE CHANGE: The right control center on the Venator (why are there two of them?…)

"P3, what's going……?"



*P327 has fallen forward, disabled. The ship is on auto-cruise control*



"I sense a trap. But what man would do this?"



*Stormtroopers and Clonetroopers swarm in from behind the elevator. One with a different suit leads them*
*Rave ignites his lightsaber in defense*
Man: "I think you mean: What men would do this!"



*More stormies and clones enter*
Rave: "Who are you, Remnant scum??"
Man: "I thought you'd recognize me by voice, even after all these years."
Rave: "You're lucky you clones all sound alike, I can just tell you're older!"



*The man steps closer. Rave bats his gun down with the force, slicing it in half as well*
Man: "Aww, look what you've done. At least I have other weapons… During the Clone Wars, we fought side by side. Ringing any bells yet?"
Rave: "…… I've narrowed it down, but I still can't tell."



Man: "Well then, maybe some more hints will help. For you see, I am…"
*Takes his helmet off.*



*Helmet off*
Man: "Commander 8311 of the 475th 'Norm' Corps. You were the general in command of it."
Rave: "8311? It can't be! Ol' Normy?"
8311: "NO! I despised that nickname. I preferred going by Lorbi, and no-one listened!!"



Lorbi: "Apparently, I was an experiment. I was tested to have force powers. Though the force wasn't completely strong in me, Palpatine trained me, and I honed my abilities. I am Sith!"



*Lorbi's lightsabers ignite, two crimson blades. Rave braces for attack.*
Lorbi: "It pleases me that you fell into my trap so easily!"
Rave: "I have surprises up my sleeves, Lorbi. That's a fact you should've considered."



"NOW!"
*Battle Droids enter the scene, taking the clones completely by surprise*


*Clone vs Droid Battle starts*
*The Battle Droids begin mowing down the clone squad*
Lorbi: "Gah! I should've expected this… YOU SHALL PAY, RAVE."



*Lightsaber Duel begins*



*Rave strikes first. Lorbi makes an X-shape to stop the blade*
Lorbi: "An old trick. You disappoint me, Rave."



*Lorbi swings his blades out of the X-shape, making Rave falter for a second*
*A droid is decapitated, and another gets impaled, but the Battle Droids obviously still hold the upper hand*



*Lorbi seizes his chance, and swings both blades down. Rave keeps them at bay with his own*



*Rave gains force strength, and plays the same game as Lorbi, only also leaping up*



*Rave somersaults over Lorbi, who's trying to catch up*



*Rave lands, seemingly vulnerable. Lorbi raises his blades up to strike……*



*……But Rave swings his blade, thus slicing off Lorbi's hands*



*Rave turns again, and with a final swing, slices off Lorbi's head*
*Also, the Battle Droids have just finished off the clones*




*Later*
P327: "So what happened while I was disabled, Rave?"
Rave: "The commander I fought with in the Clone Wars mustered up a squad of clones to kill me."



P327: "Really? What were his motives?"
Rave: "I can only guess he wanted the old Republic back, and I was an obstacle in that plot."



*P327 turns to get back to the controls*
P327: "Well, it's good to see you're alright."



*A droid approaches Rave*
Droid: "Sir! Incoming transmission. Sent on a private feed."



Rave: "Really? Well, patch it through."



*Person speaks*
Rave: "What? Where are you?"



*Person replies*
Rave: "What are your coordinates? P327, set the hyperdrive. We'll be over there as soon as possible!"



END


Phew! It. IS DONE. Uploaded 7:47 pm Eastern Time!!

NOTE: Guest Star is Commander 8311 WHO IS Commander Willis, moi. I didn't call him Willis because that's an incredibly odd clone nickname, yes?


Elite Commander T Fett Score: 90/100

Elite Commander CC-7576 Score: 91/100

Elite Commander Fed Score: #/100



BTW, here's Elite Commando Xela's Comic Entry.



Comments

 I like it 
  December 23, 2008
The battle droids won a shootout... Whoah man, whoah...
Willis,  the Legomancer
 I like it 
Elite Commander CC-7576
  December 22, 2008
Judgeing: 20 of 20 for scale (Venator is awesome, bridge is awesome, everything is awesome!!!), 20 of 20 for story (this was so cool, I nexer thought about making such a comic, this was fantastic!!!), 29 of 30 for Lightsaber battle (with a little bit more force it would be perfect), 20 of 20 for Clones v.s. Droids (Very very very good work, it looks realistic and good), 2 of 10 for guest (Useing yourself is not a guest, there I have to be fair, look at s. wood, he has done the same mistake). Final points: 91 of 100 (This could have been perfect if you would have used Fed, or anyone else, exept of you).
 I like it 
  December 22, 2008
I agree again with CC, I mean It's great the only setback was the guest star 90/100. Besides that one thing it was great! ~ECTF
 I made it 
  December 21, 2008
I spent most of my afternoon GIMPing up the first pic, and decided it was taking WAY too long :) I'll post the Venator as a separate MOC sometime soon.
 I like it 
  December 21, 2008
Great! first comment XD!
 
By Willis, the Legomancer
Add to my favorite builders

13
people like this. See who.

1,359 visitors
5 comments
Added December 21, 2008
 


LEGO models my own creation MOCpages toys shop AoT Round 2 Comic Entry: Armies of the PastBattles and dioramas


You Your home page | LEGO creations | Favorite builders
Activity Activity | Comments | Creations
Explore Explore | Recent | Groups
MOCpages is an unofficial, fan-created website. LEGO® and the brick configuration are property of The LEGO Group, which does not sponsor, own, or endorse this site.
©2002-2014 Sean Kenney Design Inc | Privacy policy | Terms of use