My second post for the lands of Mythron group. This is my universal challenge entry and I'm very pleased on the way it turned out. Enjoy
About this creation
It was early morning and I was walking down the deserted streets of Reedus to start my guard shift. The freezing air made it so no one was about. In the taverns and inns tension was rising and outlaws and sellswords were becoming restless. It was then that I heard loud shouting and breaking glass from the tavern that I was passing.
I enter and I see some of my worst fears come alive.
Outlaws! They were ransacking the place. I found five of them all armed.
Then I see the man next to me. He was armed with his sword pointed at the Outlaws. He must be the one they want I thought.
I was about to leave, taking this man when I felt a dagger pointed at my back. We were trapped! There was only one thing I could do to get out of this situation.
Me: Bring forth you leader. I challenge him to single combat. If you win you can do whatever you want with us but if I win then you and your band are under arrest.
Leader: I accept yor challenge. We shall fight outside.
When we exit the tavern I sit against the wall next to the stranger.
Me: If you don't mind I have some questions for you.
Stranger: What do you need to know?
Me: Lets start with your name and the question of what in blazes do these outlaws want with you.
Stranger: My name is Benedict and it's a long tale on why these Outlaws want me.
Me: Well I need to know this information.
Benedict: Where shall I begin. It all started when I joined the Outlaws. We had...
Before he could say much the leader interrupts by saying.
Leader: The time is now. Your defeat is certain. Do not delay any further.
I go meet him in front of the tavern.
Leader: Give up now and I promise I will give you a merciful death.
Me: I don't think that's going to happen.
Then he sends his sword at my so hard I almost lost my balance. Luckily I got my sword up In time to parry the blow.
After that, he uses his shield to hit into my side. The force of the hit sends me backwards.
After that hard blow I'm in pain but I see the next blow coming and I come up In parry the attack. The problem was I left my torso open and I got a knee in the gut.
The knee made me stumble back to the wall and then he was on top of me again. This time I was able to block the attack and the tip of his sword just missed my head.
I then use his momentum against him and send him back. At that same time I send my sword at him and cut into his chest.
He then falls to the ground. I put my sword at his neck show that I had him beat.
Me: Stand up and drop your weapon. I have honor so I will not kill a disarmed enemy on the ground.
I had won the fight. Then I realize that I am surrounded by armed Outlaws. Not the best situation to be in.
At the time I'm thinking this I see Benedict with Five Mythronian guards coming at my aid.
The Outlaws later surrender and are imprisoned. But my problem is that I'll never know what they wanted from Benedict. He disappeared after the battle. It bugs me, because I now wonder what information would be so important for Outlaws to attack in the Reedus the capital of Mythron?
Very good textures on the wall of the tavern! I enjoy writing stories myself, and I can tell you spent some time developing this. Think about who your characters are, and what they are being motivated by. If your adversary is a knight, then there's a good chance he'll agree to a duel. However, if he's an outlaw and he has you cornered, he'd be foolish to give you a chance in single-combat, and it might be more realistic to show you breaking away from the outlaws and forcing their leader into the open at the point of your sword. Also, if you're able, you can sometimes give your characters distinct attributes in their fighting. If a character seeks honor, you can show him giving his opponent chances all throughout the bout, rather than waiting until his enemy's down before sparing him. If a character's an outlaw or an enemy, you can write about his ducking and evading your blade, rather than showing him always on the offense. Aside from grammatical problems your story's pretty nice already. However, little touches like these can make your stories even better.