No offense but you have bad timing and its hard to understand whats going on. Maybe trying just writing a story or comic or something else, and not something dependent on other people like a mafia, that probably won't work right now.

Its because of a bad camera, and no money to get a better one. And I'm working on the second part.

really poor photography, no plot whatsoever, I can barely tell what's happening. You need to put more effort into this. also, the MOCAthlon is on... Really bad timing.