This MOC is... odd. Not the physical build, but the page as well. There are things that are a little bit off about everything, but at the same time it's still well presented and the MOC has a very good aesthetic and design going that I really like. First off, the text is hard to read on a white background. Secondly, it's not necessary to capitalise every word in the description. It was difficult to unsderstand, but I got the gist of it, and Crystal is a pretty good character, I think. As for the build, it's clear you have painted parts, and in this case it looks really good - but other people on the site have very different opinions about painted parts. What I really, really don't like about the build is her torso. Her proportions aren't right; shoulder/hip ratio is off, breasts are a stud or two too high up on the torso, etc. I reccomend looking here
http://lol-pretzel.deviantart.com/journal/This-Gets-on-my-Nerves-Proportions-348923417 There's some useful stuff on DA intended to help people draw humanoid figures, but it works with MOCs, too.