I added music cues to enhance the story. You may look at the video cover and ask, what does this have to do with the series? Well, I looked all over to find appropriate music for certain scenes.
Music Cue
Many Years Ago
A man, a tired man, stands alone in a room. A fire is roaring, warming the house.
Though he is alone now, he wasn't always. His company, lies dead on the floor. The voices in his head try to tell him, her death was not his fault, but he believes he is to blame for her demise.
More voices enter his thoughts, but they are not his. "Alright, let's start with your name."
"Your real name."
His voice responds, "My name is... Sacretis and I have a warning."
Present Day
Agent Filmore: "No, I said your real name, not some nonsense."
Sacretis: "I told you my name, are you not satisfied?"
Agent Johnson: "Crazed attackers don't satisfy us in any way."
Sacretis: "Right, saving that politicians life, makes me an attacker and my truths delusions?"
Agent Johnson: "Yes. Assaulting two agents, then focusing on a crowd. Hardly heroic."
Sacretis: "How else would I gain your audience? If I punched an officer, I'd get jail-time. I threw hundreds of tiles into the air, after shooting a sniper and it brought me to you, FBI agents."
Agent Filmore: "None of these acts have been confirmed."
Sacretis: "Covering it up? You can't keep your people in the dark forever. There were around twenty people who saw what happened in that plaza, word will get around. Sooner or later, angry citizens will march here, wondering what other secrets you are keeping quiet."
Agent Johnson: "But why? Why would you want to talk to the FBI?"
Sacretis: "To warn you, like I stated earlier."
Agent Johnson: "Warn us about what?"
Agent Filmore: "Johnson."
Sacretis: "Do you remember the Xenthlo Incident?"
The Agents look at each other. The Xenthlo Inicident was a highly classified occurance that took place in the first Gulf War."
Agent Johnson: "How do you know about that?"
Sacretis: "I was the cause of it."
Agent Filmore: "The Xenthlo Incident was a military accident, if you think you were responsible, you're kidding yourself."
Sacretis: "Oh, but I was. Back in the early 1990s the United States deployed troops in the Middle East, to stop Iraq from taking over Kuwait, or so the politicians would have you believe. During that time I was in the Marine Corps and was deployed."
Music Cue
The day of the incident, my squad was advancing through a ruined town. Everything was quiet, the only sound was our own footsteps, then came an ambush.
Iraqi soldiers rained bullets from every position imaginable,...
...we had to duck into a nearby building.
We were trapped there, unable to even peek outside.
I managed to take shots at the enemy, but after a few flashes of my weapon I would have to re-position.
My ammo ran dry and we were still pinned. That's when we heard it,...
...an enemy tank advancing on us. They wouldn't dare enter our cover, so they thought they'd just blow it away.
I had no choice, I needed to do something.
Music Cue
I ran outside, dodging lethal rounds, and found the tank.
I raised my hands, lifting the tank off the desert floor.
I located where most of the enemy was positioned and threw the vehicle.
The firefight stopped immediately, the soldiers were either stunned, or helped out the wounded.
This was the best chance we had to get out, so I ran back to my squad and ordered a retreat.
We returned to the base.
My squad reported to the nearest officer, describing what happened at the town.
When I went to sleep that night I woke up in a room, quite like this one. I went through hours of questions and was eventually discharged from the Marines entirely."
The agents starred at one-another again. Neither of them were given details as to what happened in the Xenthlo Incident. Agent Johnson was curious, but Filmore was very skeptical.
Agent Johnson: "How?"
Sacretis: "I am not an ordinary person, I have been born with special abilities. These powers, strength, skill, and will, allow me to perform incredible acts. Strength allows me to overcome physical challenges, like fighting or falling. Skill, gives me accurate results when flinging projectiles. And will, perhaps the most impressive, let's me cast powerful magic."
Agent Johnson: "What about the warning?"
Sacretis: "I have been studying will for many years, over five centuries. I can use my will-power, to see into the future. That's how I knew the politican was in danger and it is why I must warn you. I have seen a terrible evil, rise in the future, that I must stop. Only I have the abilities to stop it, but I decided to warn the Government, hoping they could provide resources. What I need from you-"
Agent Filmore: "That's enough! Superhuman abilities, seeing the future, magic!?!? It's all garbage!"
Sacretis: "I know it may be hard to believe, but what I am saying is true. If you'll ju-"
Agent Filmore: "Shut up! We're done questioning you. We'll just plant you in a mental institute untill we figure out what to do with you."
Sacretis: "Oh? Did anything I say hint I would accept being contained."
Agent Filmore stares agrily back at the man, Agent Johnson, started to back up, worried.
Agent Filmore: "You're not going anywhere."
The second Agent Filmore finished his sentence, Sacretis propelled the table into both agents.
To Be Continued
Thanks for watching! I choose the Assassin's Creed Revelations soundtrack for this chapter because the music fit nicely for the middle east flashback.
I'm loving this series! It's very much like my series I'm working on. Though it's about teenagers with superhuman abilities, and a prophecy. I'm trying to get it onto the 'Pages. But, anyway, great work on your builds!
Quoting Original Channel of MOCpages (Caleb)
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Ya, sometimes I can write out a good paragraph, other times I read it back and I yawn. I was actually a bit worried about the builds, because the desert ones aren't that great to me. Except the base.
I like it! Keep it up. I know you like comments that help you improve, so here's one. 1) Don't let this get too complicated. I love complicated plots, but it requires you reading through every single episode. You will find that the longer the series runs, the more your audience dwindles. This is a sad, but true truth. Another thing, it sounds like someone bored is telling the story. I'm not trying to be offensive, just try to make it more interesting to READ. The build and everything is great, but the reading quality should be that of a book. But still, great job.
