This takes place at a museum,when two thieves come and try to steal
a diamond,luckily the alarm went off when they tour threw the wall
with a pickax and four police cornered one, the thief called threw
his walkie-talkie saying"Houston we have a problem." to the other who
is making a getaway.
Not bad with the small MOC that you've created. Something larger with more detail might have scored you higher. Meanwhile, for what we've got here, score of 2.