Hey guys! Sorry about not posting anything in ages, exams kinda limited MOCing time :/ Anyway since I'm done with them I can post something, and that something is Zethlin! Enjoy ;)
Oh and big thanks to my main man Baron Von Ben for editing those pictures for me ;)
Also please read the bio, I worked hard on it, and I hope you like it ;)
About this creation
ĒYou cannot ignore the injuries youíve caused me! You are a coward! Therefore turn and draw!Ē
Zethlin to The Toa Lotem~
Species: Toa (formally) Hordika/Makuta
Element: Sonics (Formally, However still has limited control ) Electricity
Race: De Matoran
Title(s): Toa, Brother, Hordika, Freak, Killer, Traitor, Makuta, Leader, End of Everything, King of the Apocalypse
Mask: Kanohi Garai (formally) No mask power
Weapon(s): Shadow Staff (Given to him by Miserix because of his high ranking in the Brotherhood), Sounds Cannon, Shoulder Turret.
Story: (Takes place after the re-formation of Spherus Magna) Zethlin was a De-Matoran who worked in a mine in Onu-Koro. He was a naturally strong Matoran who whenever he wasnít working, was showing off to the Ga-Matoran who visited the mine every day. He was considered to be the strongest worker in the mine and he often helped out others. He wasnít the kindest of Matoran, he usually did whatever it took to get the job done and he never slacked off. Heíd usually yell at anyone not trying there hardest or anyone who wasnít working when they should have been.
One day in the main tunnel a rookie Matoran worker caused a flood in the mine after hitting a pipe. This caused a lot of water to come gushing out of the pipe and in seconds the tunnel was a quarter of the way full. Zethlin was in the tunnel when this happened and he immediately used his strength to rip a boulder from the wall and place it in the hole of the pipe to stop the flooding. Zethlin saved thousands in the mine that day.
For Zethlinís heroic act the Turaga of his village, Turaga Altus, awarded Zethlin a Toa Stone. Zethlin became a strong and wise Toa of Sonics that same day. Zethlin considered it to be the best day of his life! The next day Zethlin awoke eager to do more work in the mine with his new powers. However, Turaga Altus would not let Zethlin do mine work and instead he was forced to guard the city as a Toa. Zethlin was crushed! The one thing he loved was now taken away from him and to make matters worse, the Ga-Matoran didnít like him anymore because he become a Toa!
Zethlin didnít like his new job at all! He tried to do some mining work whilst he was on guard duty, but every time he did he got scolded by Altus. So Zethlin complained to Altus and begged him to let him do something more interesting than guard duty. Altus later assigned Zethlin to become a soldier for the OOMN. He went on many missions and every one of them was a success, mostly because Zethlin had his sheer strength on his side. On Zethlinís 7th mission he was ordered to go on a mission with Twin Toa. A Toa of Radium named Navis and a Toa of Barium named Carina. The three Toa were sent to a forest North of Le-Koro to investigate disturbances that had been happening there.
The Toa arrived at the forest to discover the skeletal remains of many dead Matoran and one Toa. However there was one noticeable thing about most of the skeletons. Their limbs were all mutated and in abnormal shapes. Confused and worried the Toa pressed on. Carina discovered a crack in a mountain covered with vines and hidden by trees. In this crack there appeared to be some kind of open door that lead into a strange looking base. The three Toa decided it was best to go inside. The Toa searched every corner of the base until they came across a strange room. It appeared to be a prison cell of some kind. The walls were covered with jail bars, however the cells themselves were dark and it was impossible to see into them. But the Toa knew something lived inside at least one of the cells.
As the Toa were trying to determine what was inside the cells a small crazy looking old man with wild bushy hair walked into the room. Surprised to see the Toa in there he threw his papers into the air and ran away screaming. Zethlin and Navis ran after the old man, but Carina stayed behind. The Mad old Scientist lead the Toa on a wild goose chase around the base. They eventually entered a room that had a large screen filling one wall and computers and other flashing buttons filling the others. The Scientist quickly ran up to one of the computers and madly pressed a series of buttons. This immediately sounded an alarm and the words ďSelf-Destruct engaged, release the VisorakĒ verberated around the entire base. The Mad Scientist laughed manically, proud for what he had done. So Zethlin punched him in the face and knocked him out. The Two Toa ran into the room that Carina was still in, to tell her that they need to leave now. However, when they arrived, they found that a Visorak had already spun a web around the Toa consuming her entire body. Angered by the loss of his Twin sister, Navis ran forward and lashed at the Visorak trying to kill it. However the Visorak was fast and it dodged Navisís attack. The Visorak leapt forward and spat venom at the Toa; it hit Zethlin in the face and Navis in the arm.
Zethlin was temporarily unable to see from the venom and was on the floor in excruciating pain from the venom. He could hear Navis fighting the Visorak, but couldnít tell what was happening. He regained his sight after he could no long hear the sounds of Navis fighting. His vision was blurred, but he could still see what had happened to his friend. Navis had suffered the same fate as his sister. He too was wrapped up in the Visorakís web and was doomed to be a Hordika! Zethlin knew that if he fought the beast, he would not win, not with his limited vision! So he ran as fast as he could!
The Visorak pursued Zethlin! With one stuff up, Zethlin would been dead! He ran as fast as he could, trying to find the exit and not be killed in the process. This was not easy for Zethlin with his limited vision. When he could see the exit he heard the speakers in the base count down from five. He knew he wouldnít be able to leave in time, but he continued to run! By the time the countdown reached its end, Zethlin had just left the doorway. The explosion blasted Zethlin away from the base and onto the Jungle floor. He looked up at the base that was now a blazing fire ball. He was filled with a mix of emotions. He had just killed and witnessed his own friends die, who he could have saved from being Hordika, but he also succeeded in completing his mission. He didnít know what to feel...
Zethlin awoke. He had pasted out after the explosion and was now under the care of the Toa. He was sitting on a bed made of Stone. His vision was a lot better and he felt recuperated after his mission. He looked around the room, noticing he was in some kinda workshop. He looked down at his legs and was shocked by what he saw! His legs were much larger than before and they were deformed in shape. They looked like legs that a Makuta would have. He looked around at the rest of his features; he had claws, spikes everywhere and yellow armour! Zethlin was so confused!
Arvach walked into the room and greeted Zethlin. He told him that he had found him shortly after he destroyed the base. Arvach had been sent on a mission to find Zethlin and the others, after they didnít return at the given time. He then took him back to his workshop in Po-Koro and he had been healing him since. He told Zethlin that he had been asleep for a couple weeks and in that time the venom had mutated most of his body. Arvach then told Zethlin that the reason he had yellow armour was because of Arvach latest invention. It was armour that bided to the subject and this armour sucked the Hordika Venom out of there system and in turn strengthened the armour. Arvach then showed Zethlin the chains that were holding him down; Arvach had used this precaution because he had no idea if the armour would work. He gave Zethlin a mirror so that he could see his new armour without having to release him from the chains. Zethlin used it to see all his new armour and to try and understand his new look. He then saw that his face had no mask and that is was a part of the armour. It looked very robotic and he felt that this was the main reason his vision was better.
Arvach left Zethlin to rest. Zethlin lay there on the rock bed pondering whether it was his fault that his friends died. As he was thinking through all this, he could feel the Hordika Venom being sucked out of him, the process was very painful, and he hated it! He screamed with pain! Then suddenly, the venom stopped being drained, and it seemed as though it was being pumped back in! Zethlin felt a surge of power... and he loved it! The venom at that moment took him over. From that moment on Zethlin was no longer a Toa, and no longer a person. Zethlin had an abundance of new strength and he used this to rip the chains off their supports, and he was free! Zethlin ran outside the workshop into a market street that had at least 30 Matoran in it. The venom that now flowed all over Zethlin controlled him, and he in turn controlled it. He was unlike any other Hordika!
Zethlin went on a killing spree, killing ever Matoran he could see; he killed every one of them in that market street. As he arrived at the final stall to kill the final Matoran, a blast of rock hit Zethlin. He feel to the ground, and then got up in an instant! He realised that the blast was from Arvach. Arvach realised that his new invention had failed and he felt terrible for not being there when it malfunctioned. It was his fault that the Matoran were dead and he knew he had to avenge them! Arvach leapt forward and swung at Zethlin with his Katana! Zethlin dodged the attack and grabbed Arvach by the top of his neck and forced him into the ground. He extended his arm and a blast of Lightning electrified Arvach! Zethlin had no idea where this electric power came from, but he was overjoyed that he could now control it. Arvach got up and swung at Zethlinís legs, knocking him to the ground. Arvach slashed at Zethlin with a flurry of attacks! Zethlin dodges a few but many hit him. Battered but Arvachís strong attack, Zethlin grabbed Arvachís blade spit it in two and punched Arvach with an uppercut knocking him out. Zethlin didnít kill Arvach. Itís not known why he didnít... but he just left him there.
Zethlin hated the Toa. He suffered greatly everyday from the venom, even though it controlled him and made him evil, the armour caused him a great deal of pain whenever he was asleep. Because of this he hated EVERY Toa and later joined the Makuta to became the leader of one of their most powerful task forces known as ďThe ApocalypseĒ
ĒI looked into his eyes while he was killing those Matoran... And I saw thought.... it was not like anything Iíd seen before! And you know how many Makuta weíve fought Nuxen! He was like none of them! He was not a Toa, he was not human! He was pure evil...Ē
Arvach to Nuxen~ after Zethlin went on a Killing Spree and spared Arvach.
Here he is! You guys like him?
Lower legs, Really happy with these :D
Close up on the lower leg :)
The back, I wanted these to look like boots that have like claws growing out of them, too add to the mutation :)
Back of the legs :D
Upper legs :)
Waist, simple but I like it.
Back of the upper legs, really happy with that Stringer claw greeble :D
Waist and head.
Waist and Heartlight :D
The custom head, SO proud of this baby :)
Upper half with turret.
Closer look at the turret :D
The upper arms :D
Lower arms and hand :)
His sound gun.
Yes he can hold it out with ease :D
His scarf/cape thingy.
His back, happy with this too :D
Back of the turret.
Hero Core greeble :)
How his tail is connected.
His tail :D
Another look at him :)
Oh and did I mention he had a staff :]
Zethlin: Goodbye friends!
Fourth Wall Commentary:
First off Iíd like to apologies to everyone on MOCpages. My MOCís were becoming... repetitive. I was using the same designs all the time, and never coming up with my own ones, and not using my own ideas. With Zethlin all of him, other than the legs and arms (Which are still my design is inspired by Awesomness257ís stuff) is my own designs/ideas, I copied no one, the designs are mine (Unlike any of some of my other MOCís. Another thing is that his staff is heavily base off Shadowgearís MOC, Bonechillís old staff.
Zethlin now begins an age where I will no longer copy others and will come up with my own ideas :)
The main inspiration for Zethlin would have to be a Faun Satyr, this guy
Yes itís Mr. Tumnus :P
So as you can see a Faun is half goat and half human, and the way I interrupted this on Zethlin was he is half Demon and half Bionicle. I believe Iíve done the best I could with it, and I hope you like it ;) Other things that inspired me would be Megatron from DOTM, He inspired the cloak and Soundwave (Gen 1) who inspired the custom head and the Sound Cannon. Also the Pokťmon Genesect inspired the shoulder turret :)
As for the theme song, there is a reason I picked this song. The lyrics all relate to Zethlin (Other than the YES OH MY GOSH, everything relates) anyway Iíll explain:
ďLook at this, Iím a coward too, you donít need to hide my friends, for I am just like you.Ē This is relating to how Zethlin is just like the Toa, since he once was one. It also relates to how deep down inside, Zethlin, if the venom didnít infect him, he would be a coward because the death of his friends made him one. However he would only be this without the venom, with it he is the complete opposite. (Remember the venom now controls him)
So yeah, thatís how it relates :D On the topic of Skrillex, I normally donít listen to this kind of music, being as I hate Dubstep, Heavy Metal, and basically anything that has dying animals in it (if you didnít get the joke thatís what they sound like in those kinda songs) Skrillex is about the only exception to this kinda music that I like. Other than them, I like none of that other kinda stuff, other than kinda music I do like though is modern pop/rock and some old stuff like Queen, Michel Jackson and U2 (But U2 isnít that old :P) Now Iím just rambling, Iíll shut up now :P
Also big thanks to my friends on Skype for helping me with Zethlin ;)
Please donīt hesitate with any comments, questions or criticism ;)
Till next time ;)
Ah, now your comment makes sense, well I don't think the quote would sound as cool if it said, he wasn't even Bio-Mechnical, so I'll keep it like that :) BTW you've liked this MOC more then once, please don't, there is enough spam on this MOC, I don't want more thanks.
Remarkable to say the least, as always. Sorry about some stuff I said earlier I am somewhat paranoid and I was worried about you but something tells me you were just going to school when my mind was thinking something terrible happened. Question for when you come back, how do you get so many likes, is it just from posting a lot in different groups or what? The moc being awesome is just a given when it comes to you, my mocs the only one that could be compared to any of yours is the newest version of my sm.
Hi Ben,i have a favor to ask.You remember how i quit?Well,can you keep Scaran alive?And maybe make my second self Moc,i dunno if i posted him,but he looks like a mix of a silver toa plus a rakshi (forgot how to spell it),so if you would,i would love it!
I noticed Legofreak has the same idea as me.Since I don't have a YT account, I was wondering if you could review Larillia. You said that we needed to tell you how it was pronounced, so just for clarification, Larillia is pronounced Luh-rill-ee-uh.
Ben, as Legofreak and others have pointed out, Moc-Advice is ending Season 1. Is there any chance you could get my newest version of Galvis on there? I'll be posting upgrades after the MocAthalon, so there will be a new version there. Any chance on being in Season 2?
No Legofreak, you are valid (I should have said something in the vid about this) MOCpages people can enter :) If you get picked in the random draw, then sure :D Anyway I'll check out all those MOC's :D
Hey Ben, I see this next MOC-Advice episode is the season finale. Nice work on making it so far! :D Can't wait to see it, and the next season. You say we have to send you message via YT to get a request in. Yeah, I don't have a YT so I just want to let you know, if you have any open spots and want to review any of my MOCs, feel free to. ;) You can choose any of my good ones, Jordan, Nexus, Gardunis, etc. But if I'm invalid cause I'm doing this wrong, that's okay. You can just tell if I am. ;) Cheers!
If you have time, I'd like your opinion on my newest poster that I made for a "youtube friend". If you don't want to you don't have to, life can be quite busy as I know from first hand with college coming up and all (for myself at least).
Hey Ben I was wondering if you could check out some of my creations. I do not wish to be annoying or pushy or annoyingly pushy but I would love to hear your thoughts and views, being the great moccer you are. Thanks a million mate. :)
On it 12lego, sadly Chrono's we finished the Rahkshi ep but... It some how got deleted D: We'll re-record it on Friday (only day we can do it sadly :/) But I can tell you your in it :) Mr. Crowe, thank you SO much, you have absolutely no idea how happy that comment made me feel! I've been having the worst week, man that made me feel so much better :) Thanks for that, it's comments like those that make me love the pages :)
For this to have been such a Hit (and for the embarrassing fact that I KNOW I studied your pics of this MOC, well... MONTHS ago) I can only but /facepalm in realization that I never rated or Commented. I am useless. ANYHOO: here are some notes appropriate to the magnitude of the build--- covering a few favorite features: the draped cape as an accessory, the limb/torso proportions, THE LEGS (woot), the color scheme chosen - but specifically the well-spaced alternating of the bands of color(very bumblebee =P), the underarm Sound Gun and the Turret deserve BIG Custom props. I'm as happy with the Custom head and back, as you are =) This is just FINE, fine work, Sir. Superb and masterful, my highest compliments, and ALREADY saved in my Folder Of Epic Stuff for inspirational perusal. CHEERS!
Hey Cossy! Could you chat now? If you can, thanks. If not, it's okay... Could you check this out possibly: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/310772, its my revamp of Tarshduk and I am trying to get asmanylikes as possible
dude i hate these types of creations but this is WOW WOW WOW WOW!!!! This must of took a long time to write and make! you have a great talent with legos for sure! i dont mean to bug u but could u check out my commander Wolffe phase 2 V2. sorry theres no link..
That doesn't bother me much, I don't mind looking at them. *sigh* I know, I'm trying as hard as I can to work on a MOC, but school is really limiting time to do that. I'll have one up as soon as I can though :)
It is really annoying me that so many of the comments on here are not about Zethlin, hopefully I'll be able to post something this weekend or the weekend after and people will stop... also gotta make that MOCadvice group, I'll do that after I post my new MOC :D Anyway hopefully you make it onto the show mate ;)
Those feet are awesome, and the armor fills up his body mass very nicely!
Is it too much to ask to look at my new MOC? I haven't been on in ages...
Hey Ben. I'm not trying to sound pushy or anything, but is there any chance you could take a look at my latest moc? I'm returning to Bionicle and am dumbfounded by the fact I only have 5 "Likes". I'm surprised. I also would like your opinion on them. If you find the time, then could you please at least look at them? Thanks Aussie! :D - KP
GAH! So sorry man, this is really annoying me, every time you ask to chat I can't D: Sorry that I can't man, please don't think I'm ignoring you! Anyway sorry, I'll try and chat with you soon mate ;) Well thank you Chronos, sure thing man :D I do look at them but never comment, I'll do it in a sec, when I got a bit of time off of study :D
Heh, I agree with Nathan, at first I thought the turret was the the head XP Not that the head is bad, but the turret looks kinda' big next to it. I'd say scale up the head a little and make the turret smaller.
You did Nathan? Either way we've picked. In the next ep we'll be having deadlines so :) Anyway I'll check it out :) Yeah Kendall, I deleted the group, I won't be building anymore Self MOC's. I'm much too busy working on other MOC's.... MOCing blocks are sadly limiting builing time though :/
To answer everyone's questions, I'm sorry, Callan and I just picked for MOCadvice, we're gonna put a deadline in the next ep for when requests will stop, sorry you all missed out, rememeber there is next time ;) I can for a bit 12lego :)
It's cool Chronos :) Thanks for apologising ;) WOAH! Calm down Nathan, There's time difference remember. I'll get to them now. Well Thanks you Brain, that means a lot :D I'll take a look now :) Sorry Mos, I can't we've already recorded everything. I'll take a look at all those now guys :D
I think that this (just like all of your other stuff) is really cool. Everything of yours has so much greeble. I don't have nearly enough parts in my collection to do what you do. You really are good at what you do. Also, you should check out my page. It only has 3 creations (Our Story) that are on it now, but others are literally begging to be put on. Plus, I want you to look at this really cool site called "The Lego Project", and there is a link on my page. I'm looking foward to seeing more great things from you!
Sweet MOC! I love the way you've used the parts! Also Raviel, it wasn't just you, MP went out on me too! And X-Box Live was down untile RIGHT AFTER MIDNIGHT. That IS creepy. Also, Since my SelfMOC is a Makuta, would he be able to get on you and Callans show? Just wondering :)
Sorry Austin, I can't, I've been at a friends house the past couple days and have 81 MOCpages emails to look at :S Sadly I won't be able to join you, However I'd love to chat with you this time tomorrow :D Just remind me again though... I'll probably forget :P
I really hope I can too Kyle, but with my MOCing Block it won't be easy, I'll try my best to get something up and done ASAP :) Cheers Robin, Please Chronos, I know your correcting grammar, but please do stop rating. Thank you.
Big thanks guys :) I'll really happy this has happened :) Thanks to all of you for your support along the way :) Please remember though, if you have already rated, please don't again ;) Anyway Berial, I'll reply on one of your MOC's like always ;) By the way guys, I have news about my lack of posts recently. due a to MOCing block I'm in at the moment :'( it's been hard to build, BUT I will hopefully have new things up soon :) So stay tuned guys ;) Thanks again to everyone :)
Hey man,I'm very much sorry for not have given you any satisfaction as to what was the status on our moc-off.I'll be very honest with you,I tried,I tried,and I tried a bit more again but as it just so happens with any other type of moc,you can't begin from the top.I'm not a rahi builder so it was veyr difficult to me to build something to compete with that scale.So yeah,again,I'm very sorry,and I hope you're not mad.
Sorry Akai, we've already recorded for the ep. Tell you what though we'll try and put a new pic at the end of the review and say that there is a new version :) Oh it will take probably more Nathan :P But that happens every time you edit a comment.
You've asked me this question before, and I answered it before, but I'll do it again. His sword has lightning powers in it. However when 4.0 comes out I will give him the blue lightning pieces making it so it works better with his element :)
Hey Cossy. I recently made a mocpages Skype and was wondering if you had a skype. My name is ToaSnipe if you have one! But my mike is broken (for now) so I can't voice chat. Well I hope you have a skype! ,Shadow
hey Ben, I was just thinking how do you know is some one is talking about a mummy (mum) or a mummy? (as in a dead Ejyption dude) in Australia? (if I'm not making any sense then just forget the whole question)
Oh I see Ware Wolf, well I recon that Werewolf look could be cool, but since your going for an assassin look, try to have him be as slim and sleek as possible. Having him look like Altair/Ezio can be good, as long as you get it right. I recon giving him a scarf/cape thing would look nice, also if you gave him a similiar look and feel to Dystrax that could look nice :D But make sure not to copy him ;) Hope that helps :D
Hmmm... well he is meant to look evil right? Also I recon he should resemble your name a bit, so maybe if you made him a little animal like (Or like a Werewolf if you wanted) that be great! Also a dark colour scheme would be great for that evil look, if he is meant to have that. :D Oh I thought you meant a chat room not a group :P Anyway could you link me please 12lego? Thanks ;)
I see, well that makes sense. I wasn't saying to go extremely slim with him, I was saying it be better if you did more of slim but still somewhat bulky look :D And I do still feel Black and red could look nice, maybe even a scarf/cape kinda thing could add to that look? Hope this all helps :D
Benny!? ... Yeah I know, I just feel that if he was skinny it would look better. I'm saying that if you made Destrin have a similiar look to what Dystrax has then he would suit the look your going for more, because I still think right now he looks very Samurai like. And I don't feel a Mercenary would look like that.
Benny, you do know that their is a difference between an assassin and a mercenary. A mercenary doesn't MEAN that the person is slim, a mercenary is someone who is paid to kill more than one person. They don't need to be slim and skinny and such.
An assassin is someone who is a slim person who only has ONE target. That is the difference, Ben.
Upload the picture the normal way but don't have it be the main picture. Then preview the page and click on the picture. Then copy the link and post it in a private group or here, but people will be able to see it here. Hope that helps.
Ok Red-Eyes, Already commented 12lego ;) Well Nathan, By "how do you start a MOC off" do you mean how do I begin one of my MOC's? Or do you mean a MOC off? Because all you have to do is challenge the person you want to battle. And to start a contest, you make a group state the rules and invite people, it says on the side of your homepage how to do that :P Anyway hope that helps :)
December 13, 2011
epic moc like the body ,the arm and leg are awesome and the color look great with the moc
guess what Nissan has a custom body now it looks pretty awesome I can't wait to show it to you!! :D I have two questions that I couldn't find the answer to. so I hope you don't mind me asking: how do you start a MOC off? how do you start a contest?
Just joined 12lego ;) Yeah I can chat now if you want :D Well Nathan... I'd look off other MOC's for inspiration, or go onto Youtube and Brickshelf where there are some How To's but I think doing your own design would be best. Don't want to copy ;)
Oh ok thats fine. One other thing do you have any good ideas for a custom body for Nissan? I've tried alot of different bodies on him but I don't like any of them that I made. So any advice would be awesome!! :D thanks for what all you do Ben! :D God bless!!
Thanks guys ;) So Kyle when you go to preview the page there are no pictures at all...odd, I'd keep trying until it works, maybe try once a day? I'd freaking love it if you did Mudslide :) Let me know when your done and it's up :D Well Nathan, I guess I'd like to see some Mechs from you. And we aren't taking any requests at the moment, but we will probably be in the future :)
It sounds cool Kyle, but I would like to see a MOC of yours first before I accept. By after the holidays do you mean after Christmas? Anyway, I hear the uploader is being odd at the moment so that could be it. What's happening to the pictures though? Are they appearing as dots? Or not showing up?
This is a masterpeice! P.s. could we have moc- off inthe near future(After the holidays)? also, I'm having trouble with uploading my photos, every time my pictures are done uploading and I click continue, the pictures vanish! any suggestions?
sorry i haven't commented on your stuff for a while. its hard to fit in the time, but i'll try to make up for it ;) this is a great build, the colors are awesome and cool details. you did great on him :)
sorry i havens commented on your stuff for a while. its hard to fit in the time, but i'll try to make up for it ;) this is a great build, the colors are awesome and cool details. you did great on him :)
Quoting Ben Cossy
Cool! However, He doesn't look very much like a mercenary to me, more like a Samurai, anyway I personally don't like his shoulders, I feel they're a bit bland, I think if you filled that up with something it look nice :) I also feel you need to make everything on him a lot... this isn't the right word but tighter. He seems to have a lot of gaps all over his body, I feel it be best if you make everything more compact and together. Also I feel his custom head is a bit all over the place, but still other than those things he looks cool! I think his torso look very cool!
I wonder why no one likes this version?! No offense, not saying you're a bad person, I'm just sayin'. :P But thanks for the critique! And I'll try to work on it :D
Now that sir is a good question! I actually didn't put the song in, Callan gave the the HTML for it. So I'm sorry but I can't help you :/ However the help tab in the top right hand corner should say how to :D
Thanks Cyborg and Red-Eyes. Greg, I think I'll just make his head bigger like Kalik said, but thanks (He acutally looks really bad without it though XD). I know what you mean A.D, I'll keep his legs the same but I'll do that on future MOC's that have the same leg idea :D
I like it
A.D Lord of Darkness
November 24, 2011
very well done, the legs are fantastic, but I think they should be able to bend a bit more, not exactly sure how I can explain what I'm trying to say, but I think you understand the gist of it. or at least i hope you do XD
Im again very late to comment on this.I hope you forgive me Master Cossy ;) The color sheme is awesome and your greebles and custom parts on this guy match together like a Clockwork.Its just mindblowing.As always I love it.You are by far my favorite Bionicle builder and you are always an inspiration for me. :D
In my recent illness, I'd neglected to look at MOCpages, and missed this! D: I love it, although I couldn't help but think he could use some tubes here and there - maybe around his waist? XD The system greebles you're using really work too, especially on that cannon of his. Delicious. :)
Thanks everyone! Sorry S.T.S I've been very busy and I haven't started. Dang it missed ya again Popcorn, sorry :/ I'm sick so that's why :/ Sorry again bro. I'll take a look Boone ;) Well Nathan ":3" is an emoticon that is basically a smug/evil smile and FTW means For The Win. Anyway yes I would appreciate it if you stopped with the questions, thank you ;)
Well thank you for the criticism RIC, but to be honest I really don't see how it isn't greebled like normal. But thanks for saying that.
It's nice, and I understand that you're trying to be original, but it doesn't look 'you' anymore. I liked your previous mocs better when you greebled them to death. (BANANA!) But he's nice anyway. I like the head.
Thanks a bunch Vored that means a lot ;) I love it Wertman :D Glad you like him and I'm glad you liked the story too ;) Eh... why not JP :P LOTR stands for Lord Of The Ring's Nathan :) Thanks Vulcane, Pure and Dragonmaster ;) Dang, missed ya Popcorn, oh well, next time ;) WOAH! Big comment 0.o Thanks Chopper ;) I'm overjoyed you like him ;) YAY criticism >:D I kinda see what you mean about the staff, thanks for saying that ;) I do agree with you on the hands, I think I was trying to go for a bit of a human kinda look with them but like you said not sure I did it right, I'll see what I can do bro ;) Thanks a tonne for that comment :D HAHA cheers Pho, thats just what I wanted to hear from ya, oh and if you think this was good, wait for my next few MOC's :3 I'm sorry I haven't posted any recently Glex Glex, I promise you that in the near future one will be posted ;) Come to think of it I'll start one now :D Thanks again guys ;)
AHH SKRILLEX :O EPIC ! I LOVE THIS ALREADY :D It took long to read everything, I wonder how u wrote it all :P His back-story along with the music makes it all epic. Man this is one destructive evil character :O He looks like a demon Wolverine. Whoah u insulted Metal and Dubstep... ok but at least it was in a funny way so i forgive u :) I love that type of music... well actually I like many types of music. U better tell me u like LMFAO! Ok now for the moc.....
I'll start from top to bottom on comments/criticism.
Head: Awesome using minifig droid pieces. IT's Genius ! It looks like wolverine and A transformer ! No words describe it's uniqueness.
Body: Detailed, full, armored, has a heartlight and male um... chest !The back is opposite of hunchback and it's really cool and demon looking ! LOVE IT !
Shoulders and cape: Nice addition :D
Shoulder cannon: It's a friggin shoulder cannon how the heck should I explain how epic that is ? ! :D
Staff: Wicked. I like all the lights and the spikyness ! Doesn't really fit this guy, but it's cool !
Arm cannon: Amazing and well made. Not too crazy about the red "Fire effect" but it's still awesome.
Arms: now, here is the criticism. It starts big and bulky with greebles, then becomes skinny towards the hand. I don't know, kinda awkward. But yeah, still great :D I think maybe it's the wheel rubber that's too small. I mean weird wrists. But meh, what are you gonna do ?
Tail and Legs: Well done and animalistic ! Genious and unique :D I Absolutely love the greebles on the legs !
SO TO SUM UP: Truly amazing, nothing really wrong with this at all. You keep getting better and your mocs are amazing and are masterpieces. Thank you for making new and amazing mocs for us to enjoy :D
WOWZA! you like skrillex to? anywayz, i like this moc, a very surreal design, and look. I must say, the story was sad, and it makes you reflect when you read it. This Moc has acctually succeeded in touching me. well done bro!
Whoa, his one is really breathtaking! This whole customness... I really haven't seen repetitive designs on you other creations, they were still looking very fantastic! But this one.. just wow! Looks like a personalized battle ram, and no one will stop him, his shoulder turret and the amazingly done cannon under his arm! This is really one of your best, "excellent" won't rate it enough. I wish there was a higher rating than just 5, I would give you 6 for this one...!
Aregon: Hey, dude, have you seen a guy named "Sniffle"? Zethlin:... A extreme good MoC, but, I got a little challange to you, mr. "Down unda". I want you to build a Bionicle dwarf! Everyone needs one, in my opinion! :P
Cheers Galaxus ;) Ok Legobob. Well thanks for that, although I'm not 100% sure what you mean since the legs are roughly the same size as the arms and also the leg movement isn't bad, but I thank you for your opinion, I'll look into it. Yeah thanks Liam, I totally agree, I might try and dim the size of the cannon a bit :)
This is really good :) The one thing I will say is that the cannon from a certain angle looks like the head and makes it disproportionate and makes it seem like he is stooping over and then at other angles he looks perfectly upright. Perhaps you should reduce the size of the cannon just a tad? But otherwise he looks great :)
He is the darkness... He is the night... He is the Bat- Oh wait, wrong show :P I once again I give you a virtual TWO THUMBS UP! d(^^d) The design is so awesome! The feet is very epic! The limbs, torso and weapon is really dang cool, and the head takes the cake! Very great job on this!
Haha dying animals...totally with you there man ;) As for this MOC, EPIC! The legs are amazing, and that head is sweet! And I won't even mention how flipping amazing those weapons are.
I like it
November 19, 2011
Wow. Just wow. I'm in awe. That is truly your best MOC that you've ever made. I know people say this about a lot of your MOCs, but I have high expectations, and that's one of the best MOCs that I've ever seen. It kinda reminds me of The Omega pirate boss of Metroid prime. Just look up Omega pirate Metroid prime on Google images. Then look at the first picture.
I like it
S.E.D. (Being of Insanity)
November 19, 2011
Awesome! Love his cannon!
I like it
November 19, 2011
Ahhh!.....Mommy.....the.....bionicle gave me a bad dreamy! lol!
I know that :P since i'm bored I'll ask you one more question, what would you make out of the Mind storms NXT 2.0? like what would you program the robot to do? (if I'm getting anoying please tell me I don't want to anoy any one!)
Thanks so much guys ;) Your comments mean a lot (Make me feel better after Exams :P) Really? You don't like the torso Legobob? What don't you like? Well thank you Cheesy! That means a lot :D Hmm... Well Ben what I've been doing recently is looking up pictures and then basing a MOC around them, so maybe do that? Hope that helps ;) Thanks so much Lego Obsessionist :D Yeah I'll fix those spelling mistakes now :) Cheers Snipe HAHA thanks Jordan, Oh there will be many more :3 Thanks Windedge S.E.D, Robin and L. Cheers Glacies that means so much ;) Hey that's not a bad idea! I might do that, if not on him on another MOC :D And a big thanks to everyone else ;)
A nice moc. The design of the custom head is great, and I see a myriad of original designs, as you stated. I also believe the turret doesn't fit very well, but it is just be my own opinion. Again, a nice moc. 5/5
I love this guy. His head is awesome, the sound gun (Although it should be cannon in my opinion :P) is gorgeous, the limbs and torso are beautiful. The turret looks great as well, I think it should be able to be detached and placed on the ground though. Because if it blows up next to his head his head might get blown up with it. All in all this excellent, amazing job.
Nice! Well built, especially the legs. The bio is great too. But I thought the turret was his head. Then I saw the real head in the pic just after the bio. "Does he have two heads?" I thought. Then I couldn't see the head for the rest of the moc. Either make the head more visible or remove the turret. I say remeoge the turret. Doesn't fit the moc.
Man, that's beast! :D All the details are brilliant! :D :D The head is amazing! The legs, arms and torso...all amazing. :) Glad you're uh, building...more uh, originally. Yeah. :P That sounded weird. XD Epic job bro. :) The story rocks and the theme fits well. Are you going to make more Apocalypse members? Could *ahem* other people *ahem* make members. XD JK bro. I'm rambling now. :P Great job, hope to see more from you soon! Cheers!
Fantastic! I love the concept. The story was very entertaining, although a few typos and grammatical mistakes kept me from enjoying it as much as I would have. The build and greebles are terrific, I love the head, although it could be a little bigger. I, personally, would also perfer a different method of color balancing- maybe larger areas of one color instead of the mixed-up one you have now. Dispite that, it looks amazing. You have some serious skills.
Wow! This is one of your best mocs ever! And the story is amazing! I love this whole thing!
I just might do a special moc for my B-Day, got asny ideas? I don't really want to upgrade Veazey because I like him the way he is. What do you think? BTW this moc is EPIC!
WOW! This is amazing the design and use of peices is amazing! I love the custom head adn posters to! And the idea of adding a tail is epic! This is my all time favorite bionicle. Keep it up! I cant wait to see more.
Even though I'm not a fan of Sport, of course I have! To sum it up, The objective of the game is to score points by passing the ball through the opponent's goal. The main way to score points is by kicking the ball between the two major goal posts. The team with the higher total score at the end of the match wins :) Hope that helps :D
Hey Ben, I have a question for you! Have you ever watched Australian football? My dad found it on our TV one day and he showed it to me. It was kind of funny to watch. My dad likes it when someone scores a goal :P Can you explain the rules also, we couldn't figure it out :P
I can't believe how awesome Zethlin is! that sort of building is way out of my reach (all those greebles and stuff). I could go on and on about this but I think I should stop before you get bored :D :D :D :D :D :D
I definitely love the legs, whole body and the guns. Head has a TF G1 vibe definitely, however I don't think it fits his beastial legs that well. It fits with the torso though, so there's a confusion is he a beast or a humanoid... :P
So,let's see;Story: 5/5;Music choice: 4/5,not quite sure how it fits with him;MOC: 5/5,Very cool!The armour is nice,I love the staff,turret and gun,and the head is amazing!I don't really do custom heads but I might give this one or something like it a try if that's alright.(Yes,I will give credit to you.);So,in summary:An all-around work of art!P.S.Hope you did alright with the exams!
Geez Ben, how many Keetorange sets do you have?!?!? How many Keetongu's do you have too? The piece usage is wonderful on this! Probably one of your best yet! How about a group shot of all your intact mocs? Keep it up Ben! - KP