Although I put the shoulders a bit higher by the new version, they may still be sloping shoulders. Photographs with a green background is new version.

Like you said on your Ex-S, I should had seen torriares work. His work is certainly a bit smoother than yours but for me yours is a very good attemp( with transformation !). Although I think you should put the shoulder a bit higher. But in all case, it's a good build ;)