About this creation
 Spherus Magna. The great planet, finally reformed by the battle between Mata Nui and Teridax those 3000 years ago. Porsperity has come across the entire world.
 In particular, we have the industrious city of Ta-Magna. It's turaga is a wise and noble being by the name of Danku. During his time, the working city has never seen better days. A recent idea proposed by Turaga Danku has truely pushed the manufacturing power of Ta-Magna. His plan, to make a legion of robot enforcers to assist the Toa in there goal of protecting their fair city. Of course, the proposal was instantly passed by the Ta-Magna parliment. The first order for 20000 robots was sent out the next day and was to be completed in 2 weeks.
 Now we find ourselves at the Ta-Magna areana were almost every matoran, agori, toa, and glatorian in the surrounding areas await the unvieling of the robots.
 Danku: My fellow Ta-Magnians, it is with great honor that i can present to you...
 Danku: Our new robot inforcers!
 *Cheers of approval*
 Danku: First we have our T-35 basic combat units.
 *impressed cheers*
 Danku: Next we have our Rs-5 special combat drones.
 *cries of fear* Matoran: Rahkshi!
 Danku: No my friends, these are not real rahkshi but merely look alikes to truely strike fear into whatever threatens us. *crowd settles down*
 Dancu: And finally we have our Ac hunter class robot.
 *thunderous applause and cheers*
 Dancu: Now to activate the robot's primary function!
 Dancu: Capture all matoran in the city!
 Suddenly thousands of robots start pouring out of all of the areana doors! Matoran: Everybody run! Toa: Hurry brothers and sisters we must protect the matoran!
 Here we find a matoran named Galvis, running for his life! Galvis: I've got to get out of here!
 But some robots are right on his trail! Robot: You can't run forever matoran!
 Galvis (thoughts):They're right, i just have to ditch these guys and...
 Galvis falls flat on his face!
 Galvis starts to pick himself up when he notices a tall green figure standing over him.
 Jurrasica:little one, you need to get out of here!
 Galvis: We both have to! Robots will be here any minute.
Jurrasica: I'll handle the robots if you promise me something.
Galvis: What's that?
 Jurrasica: You get this to a being named Dalta. He wears the legendary Mask of Time. It's vital he gets this information.
Galvis: I...I'll... I'll do my best!
 Galvis takes the scroll from Jurrasica.
 Jurrasica: Now go young one!
Galvis: But you'll be killed!
Jurrasica: Just go!
 Jurrasica: Besides,*drawing his sword*, i can hold my own in a fight.
 Galvis looks up at his mysterious savior. Galvis: Ok!
 Galvis continue's running towards the gates of Ta-Magna...
 and turns around to see...
 Jurrasica dueling one of the robots!
 Galvis turns around and continues to run while thinking: Hopefully he'll be alright but right now i have my on task to focus on!
 Jurrasica and the robot conitnue fighting!
 Suddenlly the robot says: Jurrasica sir, the matoran is gone.
Both lower their weapons
Jurrasica: Thankfully. I was beginning to grow tired of playing the noble hero act. Everything went according to plan. We'll make sure that matoran gets our "special package" to that fool Dalta and then the next part of our plan can begin!
Robot:yes sir, shall we go back to the areana?
Jurrasica: Yes we should.
About an hour later
 Five beings run across the outskirts of Ta-Magna. Dalta: Quickly everyone, into the portal i've opened. Dalta jumps into the portal
 His four companions are following closely behind him.
 One by one they jump through the portal!
 They emmerge, sprawled across a new location but otherwise unharmed.
 The sound of foot steps approaching can be heard.
 A figure stands above Dalta!
???: You'd better have a good reason to show up univited like this old friend.
End of Chapter 1
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Ed Adlam September 24, 2011 |
nice first chapter. i wonder when you are going to make another chapter!:D |
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Wow....This is intruiging!I certainly hope that this series continues! You just earned a fave! PS: If thare was anything that I would suggest, it would be to use a brighter lighting source (for example, I have a lamp that I use only for MOCing. It works well for teleporter effects as well!) when you're mocing. Some of your pics look a little dark. |
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August 28, 2011 |
Nice use of those stadium pictures and such, it gives a good city feel. I plan on having lots of photoshoots in my garage to try to capture that industrial city feel when I make my comic. Getting good lighting will be a challenge, but I hope it works out. :) |
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August 28, 2011 |
awesome chapter! this is going to be a great series :) |
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August 28, 2011 |
A very awesome chapter! I really like how you mixed those pictures with your own, great idea! What an epic cliffhanger and epic idea with Jurrasica! Great work ;) |
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August 27, 2011 |
Quoting L. Nguyen
excellent first chapter i cant wait for whats next!
Hey thanks! |
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August 27, 2011 |
excellent first chapter i cant wait for whats next! |
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August 27, 2011 |
Quoting toa Stryker
very nice, i enjoy it so far, can`t wait for chapter 2, the only thing is that the fight sequence between jurassica and the robot could haave been more expressive (Wider shots, and moving the figures more than just putting their swords together and having them stand completely straight up) besides that very cool beans my man and can`t wait for 2
Thanks for the comment and i get what you're saying but it was really supposed to just be Galvis looking back for and instant and seeing them clash swords. The actual fight scenes, hopefully next chapter, will be better. |
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very nice, i enjoy it so far, can`t wait for chapter 2, the only thing is that the fight sequence between jurassica and the robot could haave been more expressive (Wider shots, and moving the figures more than just putting their swords together and having them stand completely straight up) besides that very cool beans my man and can`t wait for 2 |
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great job using all of the groups ideas in the chapter now we have to wait for the next amazing chapter!!!! |
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August 27, 2011 |
dude that is awsome!! great premier man! cant wait till chapter 2. i also have a idea for a catch phrase: Demons!..etc... lol |
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JPfan65 Studios August 26, 2011 |
Awesome! Jurassica Was Awesome In The Story =D! BTW It's Jurassica Not Jurrasica....No Two R's =/...But What The Freak Ever, Awesome Story =D ! |
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August 26, 2011 |
Quoting Chopperskull (Leader of air)
first the word is "enforcers" not "inforcers." Sorry, just trying to help out. Amazing chapter, i can't believe it's finally here. I loved the beginning, amazing idea !
Lol i'll change that. |
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August 26, 2011 |
Ooooo, Galvis has a mysterious scroll that could mean the end of Dalta! I must protect it with my life! :) Awesome man! This sounds like it is going to be such an awesome story! Again, thanks for making me. Jurassica is evil, Galvis has the weight of the world on his shoulder's (again), and Dalta meets a mysterious figure at the end! Great job M G! |
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August 26, 2011 |
first the word is "enforcers" not "inforcers." Sorry, just trying to help out. Amazing chapter, i can't believe it's finally here. I loved the beginning, amazing idea ! |
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August 26, 2011 |
Nice for a first chapter! |
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