Prologue for my new story...
About this creation
This is Marra, a Toa-in-training. She comes from a Water Tribe outpost, not miles from where she lies in waiting now.
And she is not supposed to be here.
She sees her chance and she dodges forward, careful not to be seen or make any noise.
She jumps down silently and peers over the rocks.
She scans the area, she saw something come this way, she knows not what, but it was no wild Rahi.
She whirls around at the sound of a snapping twig.
She remembers back to what Toa Hahli said, "Makuta are usually crazed mindless fools and don't pay attention to their surroundings, making it easy to detect where they are."
Marra didn't think there were any Makuta around here, and yet...
Suddenly, it hit here like 3000 volts of lightning, and she knew what that felt like.
She slowly turned her head and found herself staring at a black figure.
"Hello, Toa."
Stay Tuned!
Some of my brothers' people might be in this. ;)
Please rate and comment!
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November 2, 2011 |
Nice!I'm gonna check out the others! |
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September 4, 2011 |
Awesome, I like how you used a natural background. |
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September 4, 2011 |
Cool Prologue! I like the way you set it outside to give the actual feeling of it being on a different planet. Great job on this! |
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August 25, 2011 |
Hey, I'm about to start a story too! I'm still working on the storyline, but its gonna be epic :) |
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August 21, 2011 |
whoah, amazing intro ! |
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August 20, 2011 |
Man, I'm sure this is gonna be great! :D |
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August 20, 2011 |
Awesome!!! very well done! It was suspenseful and stuff, great job! |
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August 20, 2011 |
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August 20, 2011 |
Awesome! is this "Marra" person gunna be a lead character? |
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August 20, 2011 |
Interesting, He looks kinda like Nexus. I will be looking forward to this comic for sure. |
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August 19, 2011 |
SWEET! What an epic Cliffhanger! This looks like it'll be awesome! Some great photography on this too Legofreak! Good stuff ;) |
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Oh, Do you think I could please join B.A.T.? |
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August 19, 2011 |
Thanks all! |
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August 19, 2011 |
Quoting Callan Lord of Fire
I am too. :( I frankly don't have that big of a selection. |
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August 19, 2011 |
cool. |
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August 19, 2011 |
Awesome can't wait for the next story!! :) |
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August 19, 2011 |
Oh boy, this should be awsome! |
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August 19, 2011 |
This looks like it's going to be wicked! |
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August 19, 2011 |
0_o AWESOME!!! I'm going to make a story soon aswell. ,Shadow |
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August 19, 2011 |
This is already sounding good =D I was wondering if you were doing a character sign up or if you were looking for more characters (good or bad, destined to die or live) then I'd gladly let you use Gabester. His story isn't developed too much and it would help me think of a better back story if he showed up in a comic or story =) |
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August 19, 2011 |
Nice. The character is cool, but I'm getting a little tired of Hahli masks. Hope to see more! |
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August 19, 2011 |
Very well done! Suspenseful, professional, and all-around awesome! |
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August 19, 2011 |
AWESOME :D
cant waint 2 see wut happens next :) |
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August 19, 2011 |
I'm SO following this! Neat work with the last panel, by the way. |
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August 19, 2011 |
Very nice! Like the fire effect. |
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August 19, 2011 |
Awesome,sure will follow the series.;) |
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