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The Tale of Mihka Nui: Chapter 1
Chapter 1 of my first story.
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CHAPTER 1

Nartuk awoke to the sound of battle. He and Derepor had been hunting rahi in the forests near Le Koro, but had not caught the rahi they were looking for. They had decided to try again the next day.


Looking up, Nartuk saw a Rahkshi of Confusion and a Rahkshi of Teleportation attacking Derepor. A Rahkshi of Fear, who seemed to be the leader, was watching them.


Nartuk was angry and surprised at himself for not waking up sooner. He started to get up, but the Rahkshi of Fear spotted him.


The Rahkshi of Teleportation made a portal, which the Rahkshi of Confusion started to drag the unconscious Derepor towards.


The Rahkshi of Confusion threw Derepor into the portal as Nartuk charged at the Rahkshi of Fear.


Nartuk is knocked back by the Rahkshi of Fear while the other Rahkshi have gone through the portal.


The Rahkshi of Fear grabs Derepor's blades and starts to enter the portal.


Nartuk: No!

He activates his mask of speed and dives at the portal.


He is too late and forcefully face-plants into the ground.


Nartuk: Ow. That hurt. I must go tell the others about this.

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The rest of the toa have met with Turaga Gonui to discuss the situation.


Turaga Gonui: Nartuk has told me about Derepor being captured, and I believe that it is very important to rescue him. The prophecy cannot come to pass with only five toa, which is why I want all of you to go on the rescue mission. Our villages will survive. It is only for a short time and Makuta will be focused on defeating you anyway.


Wuti: Who will be the leader in Derepor's absence?


Nartuk: Magia should be. She is deputy leader.


Turaga Gonui: Magia, will you lead the team in Derepor's absence?

Magia: Yes, but we are going to find Derepor very soon anyway.

Turaga Gonui: Okay. Until then, you are the leader.

Magia: We should leave tomorrow at dawn.

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That night, Nartuk sat on the beach staring at the stars.

Nartuk: What a strange star. It looks almost as if it's getting bigger.


Nartuk: Wait! That's not a star, and it's not getting bigger! It's getting closer and it's coming right at me!

Nartuk jumped up and grabbed his daggers. He got ready for whatever it was to come.


Comments, ratings, and constructive criticism are appreciated.



Comments

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  July 19, 2011
sweet jesus yats amashing i love it cant wait for more!
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  June 25, 2011
Ooh! Epicness! :D
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  June 13, 2011
Very nice, I can't wait for chapter two.
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  June 13, 2011
Cool story so far!
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  June 13, 2011
SWEET! Excellent cliffhanger! I'm surprised at how well this comic works when your only using a white background! Anyway brilliant stuff! I really like how this is going! Great work!
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  June 13, 2011
Great story! Can't wait for more!
Nathan Davis
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Cheesy Q
  June 12, 2011
Wow, that is a great opener for a comic.
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  June 12, 2011
cool story. really like the toa, and rahkshi.
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  June 12, 2011
Looking good so far.
  June 12, 2011
awesome. I like this story already!
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  June 12, 2011
Well done, very well-written!
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  June 12, 2011
Wow! This looks very interesting! I can't wait for more! :D
 
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