Chapter 3 New Arrivals
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Our friends have realized that Makuta is coming to Bara Magna and that the entire planet is in danger! The Rahkshi that escaped the Toa’s grasp has returned to Aqua magna and found the body of the Portal Guardian Cossy killed, The Rahkshi is now explaining to Makuta everything he’s seen!
(Also thanks to new technology, Rahkshi speech will be able to be translated, enjoy!)
Makuta: So you’re telling me that a small group of Toa escaped from my body, Killed one of my Portal Guardians and ended up on Bara Magna with Mata Nui!
Rahkshi: Rawr! Reiii! Rorr! *Translation* Yes my lord, I don’t even know how Mata Nui survived! Your plan was foolproof! But as we speak the Toa are growing stronger!
Makuta: HA! The Toa will never be as strong as me
Makuta: Then how did the escaped Toa do this?
Rahkshi: Grrr! Reiii! *Translation* I have no idea my lord, I only know that they are on Bara Magna with Mata Nui.
Makuta: Hmmm...
Makuta: Vezon! Get over here!
(Vezon emerges from the Shadows to speak to Makuta)
(Vezon bows before his Master)
Vezon: What is thy bidding, My Master?
Makuta: Rise Vezon! This Rahkshi has some important information I want you to listen to.
Vezon: Of course Master!
Makuta: This Rahkshi has told me that some Toa escaped from my body, One of My Portal Guardians is dead and that Mata Nui lives!
Vezon: What! That’s impossible!
Makuta: A Rahkshi wouldn’t dare lie to me!
Vezon: Hmmm...This complicates things...
Makuta: I plan to leave this planet and find Mata Nui! Vezon! Ready my army! I’ll be leaving for Bara Magna soon.
Vezon: Ah good! I’ll be right on it!
(Vezon walks off)
Makuta: Oh and get me my weapons!
(Vezon stops walking)
Vezon: Anything you say master.
Makuta: But before you do, deal with the failure!
Vezon: Finally, some fun!
(Vezon swings his arm down...)
(...And grabs the Rahkshi by its throat)
Rahkshi: Reeiii! Rorr! *Translation* W...What are you doing! I’ve done nothing wrong! I even gave you information!
Vezon: As true as that may be, You failed us!
Rahkshi: Reei? *Translation* How so?
Vezon: You may have escaped and told us this information, By you should have killed one of the Toa! Or have captured one!
Rahkshi: Reeeiiii! *Translation* B...But I!
Vezon: No words can save you now!
(Vezon snaps the Rahkshi’s throat and throws his lifeless body on the ground, as he does this he says...)
Vezon: Failure!
(Vezon leaves and returns with Makuta’s weapons)
Vezon: Here they are Master, and your Rahkshi army has been loaded into your body for transport!
Makuta: Good work Vezon!
Vezon: Before you leave, Makuta, I have one question to ask you
Makuta: What?
Vezon: The Portal Guardian, what are we going to do with him?
Makuta: I’ll just use my powers to bring him back to life!
Vezon: Hmmm...I don’t think that is a wise decision!
Makuta: Then what do you propose?
Vezon: Well Makuta, as your Apprentice, I feel that our Portal Guardian’s need...an upgrade
Makuta: An upgrade?
Vezon: Yes, the reason he was killed was because, when you created him, you didn’t give him the power to...think for himself
Makuta: I didn’t give the Portal Guardians that for a reason! That way they wouldn’t betray me!
Vezon: I know Makuta! I feel that you need to take that risk!
Makuta: Never! I don’t want them betraying me!
Vezon: They won’t Makuta! If you only give them a small amount this ability, then they shouldn’t betray you...Well what do you say?
Makuta: Fine! But this better work Vezon!
(Makuta uses his powers to change the Portal Guardians, appearance, mind and also to bring him back to life)
Vezon: It will work Makuta!
(Makuta finishes transforming the Portal Guardian)
New Portal Guardian: W...Where am I?
Makuta: You were killed by Toa, and I’ve brought you back to life!
New Portal Guardian: I...I Feel d...different
Makuta: Your still recovering from your...treatment, I’ve given you a new mind, a new appearance a and new abilities
New Portal Guardian: Abilities?
Makuta: Yes, you now have the power to think for yourself, This means it will be easier for you defeat enemies, however it increase the likelihood of you...betraying me! If you do... You’ll regret...
(The new Portal Guardian interrupts Makuta)
New Portal Guardian: Don’t worry, I will never betray you
Makuta: You better not! Now enter this portal and go to your old post!
(Makuta Opens up a Rahkshi portal)
New Portal Guardian: I only have one question for you before I go, Can I choose my own name?
Makuta: *Sigh* Fine!
Chessy Q: Hmmm... I KNOW! I’ll call myself... Chessy Q!
Vezon: Alright then
Makuta: Now get to your post!
Chessy Q: Will do!
(Chessy Q enters the portal and it closes)
Makuta: Good, Now that he’s gone I will leave for Bara Magna.
Vezon: Excellent! As I said before your army is loaded, and everything is ready!
Makuta: Good, Now While I’m gonna Vezon, You’ll be in charge!
Vezon: Excellent my lord, I hope you’ll enjoy your trip!
Makuta: I will, and when I return, I will have Mata Nui’s mask!
(Makuta flies off into the air, making his way to Bara Magna!)
MEANWHILE ON BARA MAGNA...
(Cossy and Ackar are testing out there skills in a ‘friendly fight’)
Gresh: Whoa! Mossdeep you were right! It looks like your new armour, has enhanced your skills!
Cossy: Ha ha! Yeah, I think your right! Thanks again Mossdeep for the new armour!
Mossdeep: Hey, No probably!
Raxonax: Hey Gelu, Do you think Mossdeep could hook me up with some new armour?
Gelu: I’m sure he’d love to, but he told me he’s running low on supplies, so...sadly I don’t think he’ll be able to just now, maybe later he could.
Raxonax: Alright then, as long as I get my armour.
Gelu: Hey, don’t worry you will.
(Cossy’s blue flames manage to overwhelm Ackar’s sword and he drops it, Ackar then falls to the ground)
(Cossy takes out his new swords and holds one against Ackar’s chest)
Cossy: Looks like I win!
Ackar: Ha! I guess you do!
Kiina: Wow! You bested Ackar! It takes a powerful Glatorian to do that!
Ackar: Well I’m happy you beat me, nobody’s done that in a long, long time!
(Ackar gets up)
Raxonax: HIGH FIVE!
(Cossy and Raxonax give each other high 5’s)
Ackar: What do you think were gonna do next?
Cossy: I’m guess Mata Nui’s gonna get us all to a safe place and find a way to activate this prototype body behind us, so he can face Makuta.
Ackar: Hmmm...I guess that makes sense, but I’d still like us all to train, we don’t know if there’s gonna be any more Skrall waiting to kill us.
Gresh: Good idea, buddy, so who’s gonna train with Ackar next? He is the best Glatorian to train with!
Raxonax: ME NEXT! You did promise remember?
Ackar: Alright then, just give me some time to recuperate!
(Meanwhile Takanuva is still getting over how he let the Rahkshi escape)
Takanuva: *Sigh* I’m sorry Mata Nui, I failed you
Mata Nui: Takanuva you didn’t fail me, Makuta was going to know about us being here, sometime in the future, we’ve only speed up his arrival
Takanuva: I guess you’re right, thanks Mata Nui
Mata Nui: Any time, now I need to tell everyone what were going to do next, if you will, can you please get everyone together?
Takanuva: Sure. *Yelling* EVERYBODY GET UP AGAINST THE WALL, MATA NUI’S GOT SOMETHING TO SAY!
Tahu: I could’ve done that!
Mata Nui: Alright everyone, I have a plan for what we’re gonna do next, If Makuta is coming here, then we need to form an army to combat him with!
Takanuva: An army? Don’t we kinda already have one?
Mata Nui: Even this powerful armada insist strong enough to take down Makuta and his Rahkshi armies! We need to form an even larger army, not to mention we need to figure out a way to active this prototype body behind me!
Gelu: An even larger army! How are we gonna do that! [And how’s it gonna fit in the frame: P]
Ackar: Well the nearest village is Tesara, There should be some Glatorian there were we can start to form our army!
Gresh: Yeah! Vastus, the first Glatorian of my village he’ll join us, and he’ll know how to get every Glatorian on Bara Magna to join us too!
Kiina: Yeah! Then we can go to Tajun, Tarix can help us as well!
Raxonax: If Makuta doesn’t find us first!
Takanuva: Don’t jinx us!
Lewa: If that Tesara place is the one over there, then I think we got a problem!
Gelu: what the heck’s going on over there?
(The Glatorian rush over to the entrance of Tesara to get a closer look at the commotion that’s going on)
Gresh: Lance, what’s going on? Why isn’t Vastus here?
Lance: Umm...Vastus is...Away, but we’re all here to stop these...people
Gresh: Who are these people? And where is Vastus?
Lance: The people just came through this weird portal thing and demanded information!
Ackar: Sounds familiar, can we talk to them?
Lance: I guess, but Raanu’s busy talking to them so, you might have to wait.
Axxon: Hahli, I don’t think your approach is working, maybe you should just tell him who we are and that we just want to find a way to stop Makuta.
Hahli: Alright then, Raanu we are...
Raanu: I don’t care! Just leave Tesara, and the Vorox can deal with you, outcasts!
Archra: Vorox?
Ackar: *sigh* I’m tired of waiting, Gresh, Mata Nui, come with me!
Ackar: Raanu!
Raanu: AH Ackar! Can you deal with these outcasts for me please!
Ackar: They’re, no outcasts, there friends of Mata Nui, just like our new friends!
Raanu: What! *sigh* Oh I can’t deal with this! Mata Nui do what you want with them, Ackar, I need to speak with you please.
Axxon: Mata Nui! It’s good to see you! We all thought that Makuta had...
(Mata Nui interrupts Axxon)
Mata Nui: So did Takanuva and the others! I’ll have to explain to you all what happened to me when I have the time.
Axxon: Of course my good friend!
Mossdeep: What the heck happen to his armour?
Lhikan: The only way we could escape was if Axxon took on heaps of Rahkshi, so when had time to escape, by the time he killed them all his armour was damaged! So Axxon just used broken armour littered on the ground to fix everything
Mossdeep: Whoa that’s harsh! Well I’m pretty good with that kinda stuff so I could fix his armour, but I’m kinda running low on parts so I’ll need to find some before I can do anything.
Lhikan: I’m sure he’d love that, but you should tell Axxon about this, not me.
(Meanwhile Raanu and Ackar are talking about how these ‘outcasts’ are friends of Mata Nui, while Gresh speaks with the other Glatorian)
Ackar: Raanu, I’m only gonna tell you this once so listen! These ‘outcasts’ are our new friends! As are the ones you came with me! Got it?
Raanu: Yes I do Ackar, *sigh* I’m Sorry I got so anger, I only want what’s best for my people!
Gresh: Strakk, I’m surprised to see you here! I thought Raanu would have made you an outcast like Malum!
Strakk: Raanu and I had an...arrangement! My punishment was to help rebuild Arena Magna, after the Skrall destroyed it!
Gresh: Since when were we rebuilding the arena?
Lance: Good one Strakk you just ruined the surprise!
Strakk: Oh, right...
Gresh: Surprise? What surprise?
Lance: *sigh* It was meant to be a surprise, everybody’s throwing you, Mata Nui, Ackar and Kiina a feast at Atero, once we rebuild it.
Gresh: What for?
Lance: HA what for, Are you serious?! You guys saved Bara Magna from the Skrall! That is defiantly reason for a celebration!
Gresh: Well thanks guys!
Lance: But don’t tell anyone! We still want it to be a surprise for the others
Gresh: Don’t worry, I...
(Cossy yells out...)
Cossy: G...Guys!
Gresh: What’s the matter buddy?
Mata Nui: Is everything alright Cossy?
Cossy: LOOK!
Cossy: I don’t think that’s a comet heading this way!
To Be Continued!
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Well that’s it Chapter 3 :D I hope you enjoyed it!
Chessy Q I know you’ll be happy since your finally in my comic, Well kinda :P anyway like I’ve said before I won’t be able to put you in (entirely) until late February when HF 2.0 Comes out here in Australia.
And Don’t worry, I’ll post my updated Cossy and my new Glatorian MOC’s (You can see some of them in the comic) as soon as possible :D not to mention with a special surprise :D
Oh and Vezon is Makuta successor, If Makuta is killed, or when Makuta dies of old age Vezon will take his place as ruler of the universe, Or so Makuta plans!
I don’t think that there’s anything else I need to say, if you’ve got any questions, just let me know :)
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June 13, 2012 |
nice work!!!!! i read these a long time ago but just now posting... anyway i loved this series!!!! make another one!!!!! |
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September 15, 2011 |
Thanks everyone! |
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Eathuis 305 September 14, 2011 |
HA,awesome! |
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September 14, 2011 |
...and thats the differance between Mata Nui and Makuta. when the Rahkshi failed, Makuta killed it, but when Takanuva messed up, Mata Nui just forgave him. |
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July 3, 2011 |
Interesting..... A comet at the end and This is how Cossy gets to meet the glatorians. Understand it all. |
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June 23, 2011 |
nice hand Cossy! ShWeEt (sweet) chapter! |
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June 17, 2011 |
Hey, if you have time, could you check out my comic, The Untold Story? |
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May 28, 2011 |
Cheesey Q? A "comet" ("cought" Maku"cough" ta) You really know how to write your stories to scare ppl lol |
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Chaos Master February 12, 2011 |
wait are you telling me this has been up sense January and i only now got around to it! ugh, sorry i completely missed it. awesome as always! can't wait to see the next one! poor rahkshi...also, i didn't know you lived in Australia. pretty cool, but aren't legos expensive there? |
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February 12, 2011 |
Thanks! Cossy will be up probably either today or tommorow. |
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February 12, 2011 |
In chapter 7, yep :D |
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February 12, 2011 |
BTW Ben, is Morack gonna be in A Story Reborn? |
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February 12, 2011 |
Thanks for commenting guys :D Nick, Teridax and Vezon aren't talking in space, they are talking on an island on Aqua Magna, Also Vezon is about the same size as Makuta, this is cause Makuta gave him his new size and power :D Chaos, Yes I do live in Australia Mate :D and sadly lego is double in price here :/ |
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February 12, 2011 |
cool terridax but you should edit the pictures so that vezon is talking to a pair of red eyes floating in darkness. because vezon is inside makuta, and bionicles can't survive in vacum. |
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Cheesy Q February 5, 2011 |
I cannot wait for more. Cossy's team s getting bigger and bigger. IT'S HUGE! |
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| Cheesy Q February 5, 2011 |
I cannot wait for more. Cossy's team is getting bigger and bigger. IT'S HUGE! |
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February 5, 2011 |
great story. so far? |
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January 30, 2011 |
Nice work! You should photograph some of this outside if the weather is nice enough. |
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January 30, 2011 |
awesome story, cant wait for chptr 4! |
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January 30, 2011 |
Deleted scene
New Portal Guardian: I only have one question for you before I go, Can I choose my own name?
Makuta: *Sigh* Fine!
Cheesy Q: Hmmm... I KNOW! I’ll call myself... Cheesy Q!
Makuta: alright, whats up with the cheesy name?
Cheesy Q: what? |
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January 30, 2011 |
Pretty good so far, you have loads of bionicles! |
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January 30, 2011 |
wow! you really have aTON of bionicles! i never suspected you had that much! thanks for the comments! wish you d live closer to involve one of your masterpiece in my city!
could have been a funky riiiide! hey hoohhh!
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Cheesy Q January 29, 2011 |
By the way, you spelled "Chessy" not "Cheesy" Two e's not one. I'm cool with that, but can you make sure his name is spelled right? sorry to bother you. |
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Cheesy Q January 29, 2011 |
You don't have to bother changing the spelling Cossy. Everybody will know what you mean. :D |
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January 29, 2011 |
Quoting LegoBob 123
Cool! BTW, I spotted a mistake! When Takanuva yells, he says "everyone up against the wall", when in the last episode you said it was a foot! You might wanna change that :)
Oh right, Well I think I'll keep it that way, cause everyone up again the foot sounds odd :P anyway thanks for letting me know buddy ;) |
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January 29, 2011 |
Cool! BTW, I spotted a mistake! When Takanuva yells, he says "everyone up against the wall", when in the last episode you said it was a foot! You might wanna change that :) |
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January 29, 2011 |
Yo, Cossy! My instructions 4 Owl will be up in 30 minutes! |
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January 29, 2011 |
GAH! The suspense is KILLING me!! I love all of it, and I like Cheesy Q's entry. I LOLed. And while we're on the topic of stories, mind checking out the Rift Chronicles? It would mean a lot to me :) Can't wait for Ch. 4!! |
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January 29, 2011 |
Augh! Whats gonna happen next! Great cliff hanger!! |
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January 29, 2011 |
Thanks for letting me know Wertman ;) btw, Cheesy Q, sorry about spelling your name wrong, Do you want me to change it? I'll make sure I spell it right next time, again sorry about that buddy! |
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January 29, 2011 |
this is so cool i cant wait to be in it! |
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January 29, 2011 |
Like the first 2 chapters, that was also a nice story. I'm looking forward to the next part. |
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January 29, 2011 |
yeah, its epic! :D |
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January 29, 2011 |
Thanks for commenting about Cossy's armour :D Do you like it Wertman? Cause I'm very proud of it! |
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January 29, 2011 |
BTW i didn't notice Cossy had been upgraded! :) |
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January 29, 2011 |
well, if thats true, then vezon will have to look out for Aroxion... he wouldn't stand a chance.
now for the main part of this comment... great job! i liked the way you introduced Cheesy Q! |
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January 29, 2011 |
AWESOME - fortrux is on his way *wink* |
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January 29, 2011 |
awsome |
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Cheesy Q January 28, 2011 |
Wow! You got a lot of people who wanna be in the comic ever since I asked. Sorry :/ |
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January 28, 2011 |
Cool story. I love that makuta design! |
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January 28, 2011 |
Thanks Owl :D Don't feel bad Chessy Q, It's not your fault! Infact Baron Von Ben was the first to ask to be in my comic. not to mention I love putting people in :D Are you happy I finally put you in buddy? |
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January 28, 2011 |
OK, it will be up by tommorow!
P.S Thanks! |
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January 28, 2011 |
Your not being annoying buddy ;) and if you could post that, it would be great :D |
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January 28, 2011 |
Sry if i am being annoying, lol, i might post a page on each individual body part if that helps.
0V0 Owl |
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January 28, 2011 |
Urgh...Chapter 7, I'll have you be friends with Callan :D, And now I will start building Owl, are you gonna post any instructions? |
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January 28, 2011 |
What is the ETA? |
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January 28, 2011 |
Alright Owl, I think I've got an idea for how I'll put you in ;) but Legofreak, I'm not sure if I have the pieces to build 2444, If I ever get them I'll try to put you in but no guarantees |
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January 28, 2011 |
I rated it 5/5, I don't know why didn't say "I like it" on the comment below. |
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Awesome! I love how you did the last picture! Say, could you possibly please put me in there somewhere?...maybe?...
Hey could you come check out my new Bionicles I put up?
http://www.mocpages.com/home.php/66213 |
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January 28, 2011 |
Ummmm, I don't think i would be good as a pet, i could ambush the toa group and threaten to kill you.... *evil laugh* i could be a undercover toa too... |
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January 28, 2011 |
What ever you say Callan ;) and Owl, I'm running low on pieces but I'll try my best to make your self moc and put you in, do you mined being someone's pet? or do you want to be a toa? |
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January 28, 2011 |
NICE! I LOVE IT! I love the clouds in the final pic. Do you think you can add me into a epicsode?(lol not a typo) I don't want to die or be bad, so can you see what u can do?
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Nah, why spoil the surprise! I look forward to it! :D |
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January 28, 2011 |
Sorry Callan, You'll be coming into the comic in Chapter 7, If you can't wait that long, do you want me to post my Callan before I post the comic? |
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January 28, 2011 |
Awesome job! Is Callan ever gonna be in there? Fine if he isn't, but I'm just wondering... :D |
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January 28, 2011 |
Woo! This chapter is very awesome! :D |
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