This in my opinion is awesome I think!!! Please dont say that you think it is to sloppy cause its hard to work with sharpies and i took 1 week to make him complete please look at my other lego creations!!!
This is good.I like that its a clone trooper made into jango which makes it more custom.Also its not sloppy or messy really but it looks like you are trying to put too many small details into it.My advise is to lightin up on the sharpie on the legs and arms.But the helmet and bodt look amazing.