Here's mah comic. :] Sorry about the bad pics. It was night-time.
About this creation
I have heard and experienced many tales, and I can remember each almost each as if it were yesterday.
But this tale, along with only a few others, was interesting. It was touching, yet horrible. Yes, I think I will tell you the Tale of Hadrian’s Path.
We find ourselves in the year 19 BBY. The Clone Wars rage on, battles all across the galaxy. No one knows when they will end, or which army will prevail. Only time can tell.
We see here a recently dubbed Jedi Knight, awaiting the arrival of his master.
Hadrian Cait [pacing back and forth]: … Sigh…
Qazar Katahn [casually]: Hadrian.
Hadrian: Master! What took you so long?
Qazar: Oh, I recieved a hologram from Ki-Adi. He said Yoda wanted me to assist in a mission on Korrlat. I tried to reach you, but…
Get in a little battle, did we?
Hadrian: No, not really. Some giant creature attacked me while I was sleeping. It got my arm, but I’m fine now. So my communicator broke…
Qazar: Moving right along. So, I had a little encounter with a Sith there…
Hadrian: Was it…
Qazar: Yes, it was your brother. I’m sorry.
Hadrian: What?
[panicky] What’s that supposed to mean?
Qazar: I…. I, I didn’t think it would kill him… Here’s his lightsaber… I think you, of all people, should have it…
[Hadrian takes it]
Hadrian: …What? You KILLED him?
Qazar: He would have killed me! And, as you know, he tried to kill Master Yoda in a duel!
Hadrian: Like he could have killed him! But you KILLED MY BROTHER?!
Qazar: He was a Sith! I sliced off his arm, and kicked him- I didn’t know there were mines! He would have killed me, Hadrian!
Hadrian: THEN I WISH YOU DID DIE!
Qazar: Hadrian, calm down! You DON’T want to do this!
Hadrian [ignites saber]: I’m following his legacy. Someone has to remember him. He won’t be just another fallen soldier!
Qazar: I-
[Hadrian attacks him]
[Qazar ignites saber]
Qazar: Hadrian! Don’t do this! –
[Blocks Hadrian’s countless attacks]
Qazar: Hadrian, think! You’re falling to the Dark side, Hadrian!
Hadrian: I – [slashes] - realized that, you foolish, you, you murderer! - [slashes] – I hate you!
Qazar: I didn’t want to kill him, Hadrian! [blocks]
Hadrian: Fight back, you piece - [slashes] – of-
[Qazar hits Hadrian’s Saber with enough force that it flies out of his hand]
[Qazar slashes at Hadrian’s hands, but Hadrian easily flings them backwards and over his head. Using the force, he quickly summons his saber and]
*FFFSSSSSSKKK*
[slices off Qazar’s arm with speed.]
Qazar: Aaagh! Hadrian – You - … You may as well kill me.
[Hadrian brings his lightsaber up to attack -]
[and de-ignites it.]
Hadrian [his voice hoarse]: I can’t bring myself to kill you, master. But I hate you.
[starts to walk away]
[He turns around]
Hadrian: The next time you see me, you’ll be walking towards your own death. Goodbye, “Master”.
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Read this. READ THIS!!! READ THIS NOW!!!!
~Well, that was the preview for my Comic. It came out okay.
I need a name for it.
~Please tell me if you found any typos.
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cool rock November 6, 2009 |
excellent comic i have a name for it how about the untold adventures of starwars |
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October 10, 2009 |
So awsome, you should make it into a stop-motion. |
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cool rock October 7, 2009 |
the red haired guys face were did you get that |
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October 7, 2009 |
Quoting cool rock
the red haired guys face were did you get that
Anything else to say about the comic?
The knight bus set. |
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September 24, 2009 |
Quoting Blade-Hawk .
Hey, Max, can you check out the bottom of my page? I have four baby dragons!
Clicked 'em. :) |
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Hey, Max, can you check out the bottom of my page? I have four baby dragons! |
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September 19, 2009 |
Quoting Nate 000
I thought I commented on this but I see I FORGOT. I love how the brother was killed, the way it was worded was good at the end, I admire the thrilling plot that my comic is getting to.: (, But as for your question. The comic is a mystery, but there is a reasoning for Nates commander treating him like a criminal, Nates commander is highly responsible and overprotective, and he was just eliminating the possibility of it being a trap by making master Shim lay his weapons down. And Ill give you a secret, Nate is an 18 year old kid that does not have a master, and that may effect the plot.
OK. Thanx. |
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September 19, 2009 |
I thought I commented on this but I see I FORGOT. I love how the brother was killed, the way it was worded was good at the end, I admire the thrilling plot that my comic is getting to.: (, But as for your question. The comic is a mystery, but there is a reasoning for Nates commander treating him like a criminal, Nates commander is highly responsible and overprotective, and he was just eliminating the possibility of it being a trap by making master Shim lay his weapons down. And Ill give you a secret, Nate is an 18 year old kid that does not have a master, and that may effect the plot. |
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September 19, 2009 |
Quoting Nate 000
Could you check out my latest comic episode?
And if your wondering if reading the first 2 parts will help you understand it, it won't this comic is mysterious.
Even with my friends, I don't really approve of advertisement on my MOC, if you don't say anything about what you think of the MOC or rate it if you haven't already. So please tell me what you think of it. But I'll check out your comic anyway. |
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Could you check out my latest comic episode?
And if your wondering if reading the first 2 parts will help you understand it, it won't this comic is mysterious. |
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Hey Max, can you check out my page? I have some new dragon eggs there. |
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September 17, 2009 |
Quoting Moodswim .
Very cool preview! Seems like a passionate story. There are a couple typos in the intro paragraph. I'd say when you upload the comic, set your pics for the "Large" setting, so it's easier to read. I just posted part 2 of Jedi Hunter:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/152989
Sweet! And at first there weren't but, I edited it so many times. :P |
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September 17, 2009 |
Very cool preview! Seems like a passionate story. There are a couple typos in the intro paragraph. I'd say when you upload the comic, set your pics for the "Large" setting, so it's easier to read. I just posted part 2 of Jedi Hunter:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/152989 |
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September 16, 2009 |
Nice job, the vig is fairly detailed and the storyline's okay. Land mines...funny. Anyway, I'm looking forward to the next installment. Also, could you check this out? http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/152479 |
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Hey Sushi go to Flickr! :D |
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September 14, 2009 |
Quoting Heber .
Get teh home one!.. Or Anakin's fighter. Uh.. Do you have any hoods? I could wear a hood.. And, I suppose I could be a rebel with some random brown hair.
I meant if I'm ALLOWED... :| |
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Get teh home one!.. Or Anakin's fighter. Uh.. Do you have any hoods? I could wear a hood.. And, I suppose I could be a rebel with some random brown hair. |
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September 14, 2009 |
Quoting Heber .
I would prefer to be a Jedi in this comic than a rebel. But if I have to be a rebel, I don't want a helmet. Do you have clone wars Anakin hair?
Then I can make you a jedi if I can find mah good sabers... And I don't have anakin's hair, but if I get the Home One, I will. :D |
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I would prefer to be a Jedi in this comic than a rebel. But if I have to be a rebel, I don't want a helmet. Do you have clone wars Anakin hair? |
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September 14, 2009 |
Quoting Heber .
What character am I in this story? A storm? A Jedi?
Who said you would be in it? Lol. JK, JK. Uh... Maybe a stormie or a rebel. Or a Jedi or a sith. Lol. XD Um... You'd probably have to be a rebel instead of Storm if you were one of those two... And would you rather be a Sith or Jedi? So rebel, Sith or Jedi? |
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What character am I in this story? A storm? A Jedi? |
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September 14, 2009 |
Quoting Blade-Hawk .
Hey, are you gonna sign up for the Mocolypics? If so, please say so in the sign up topic.
I did. :] |
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Hey, are you gonna sign up for the Mocolypics? If so, please say so in the sign up topic. |
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September 13, 2009 |
cool man that is awesome! i can't wait till its out! |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Recon Commander: Commander Reek
That's fine. Green arms work fine.
OK. |
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That's fine. Green arms work fine. |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Recon Commander: Commander Reek
Cool! Could Commander Reek be in it?
GEE, guys, what do you WANT from me?! Lol, jk. I'll try to fit you in, Reek, you were one of mah first friends. I MIGHT not customize you, but I'll make you a Stormie. |
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September 12, 2009 |
Cool! Could Commander Reek be in it? |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Cole Fynn
A bounty hunter. Named eloc nnyf or eloc nyff whichever way you want to spell it. Or I could be a storm commander named metal. Or an officer named liuetenant hawk.
Well. Now I only have 2 or 3 stormies, and I have no officers... I'll try to fit you and Matt in eventually. |
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A bounty hunter. Named eloc nnyf or eloc nyff whichever way you want to spell it. Or I could be a storm commander named metal. Or an officer named liuetenant hawk. |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Cole Fynn
Sorry about not rating it.
That's OK. And if you do guest star, what do you want to be? |
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Sorry about not rating it. |
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September 12, 2009 |
Awesome ! Can I guest star ? |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Blade-Hawk .
Lol. Hope you do good.
The next one's will be better, I hope. :] |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Blade-Hawk .
Saweet. It looks like it will be awesome.
I know. Lol. |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Commander Kly
Cool! Good Back story Call it Betrayal
I'll think about it. |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Cole Fynn
Awesome ! Can I guest star ?
Maybe if you rate it. Lol. |
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September 12, 2009 |
Saweet. It looks like it will be awesome. |
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September 12, 2009 |
Cool! Good Back story Call it Betrayal |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Ben The Lego Builder.
That is an awesome preview to what seems like it's going to be an awesome comic!
Thanks! |
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September 12, 2009 |
Quoting Cadet Private Arbogast, Gregory
Nice comic,but why do you go to bed on weekends like at 9:00?lol
10:30. Eastern time. |
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September 12, 2009 |
That is an awesome preview to what seems like it's going to be an awesome comic! |
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September 11, 2009 |
Nice comic,but why do you go to bed on weekends like at 9:00?lol |
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ok, just 2 let u know I am a Gray Jedi(Better then the Dark Jedi), C ya |
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September 11, 2009 |
Thanks. Yeah, it does sound sorta funny.I considered changing it. And maybe, Matt. I dunno. GTG to bed now. TTYL, guys. |
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September 11, 2009 |
Duuudddeee. This is an epic first part! I like the part when he described how he killed him. I find it funny. Land mines.. |
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September 11, 2009 |
Sweet, Can I be in the Series as My self as the Bounty Hunter with the Force Powers of Both Sides?? |
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