This is my first comic so the background might me crappy and some pics also. I just want to know if you like the story, and if it is clear and understandable, and weather the action is good. Oh by the way, the green 1 is Di'kutt and the blue one is Daro. Please RATE AND COMMENT!!! THANK YOU!!!
About this creation
Daro: I have to move to the next obstacle, cover me.
Di'kutt: Bogey sighted!! Procede with extreme precaution!
Daro: Precaution? What does that mean?
Di'kutt: Very funny...
Daro: moving to position.
Di'kutt: Alright, I got you covered, move, move,move!!
Daro: Alright, I am in position...wait... Bogey at your 11!!! careful!!!
Di'kutt:Roger that, waiting for target...
Di#Kutt: Take that you Sep. Scumm!!
Di'kutt: Target neutralized.
Daro: Ok, I need you to tell me when I can move to the gate.
Di'kutt:Roger, I'll let you know.
Di'kutt: We have 2 sentrys guarding the gate...
Di,Kutt: Now!! they are distracted!! move up!!
Daro: Moving into position.
Daro: Permission to advance?
Di'kutt: Given. Just move your butt.
Daro: Say your prayers you Sep. scum...
Sentry: Willy were did.... Republic Commandos here?!?!?
Sentry: Die you PIG!!
Di'kutt: I don't think so...
Sentry: uugh...
Separatist troops: What was that?
Daro: Say hello to my z-6 rotary!!!! HAHAHAHAHAHAH
Sentry: Republic trash... they killed johannes... they will pay...
Daro: Area cleared...
Di#Kutt: Get down NOW!!
Sentry: AAUUGH!!!!
Daro: Thanks man. That was close. Fierfek.
Daro: There is the objective. Lets go.
Di'kutt: Roger that.
Last Sentry: I am the only one left. I MUST destroy these suckers... taking aim...
Sentry: EAT PLASMA BOLTS!!!!!
Di'kutt: WHat in the Jedi's nam...
Daro: JUst get down you genius!!
Daro: Get To cover dang it!!!!
Di'kutt: He's got us pined down!!
Daro: Here, take my DC and gimme some covering fire.
Di'kutt: GO GO GO!!! Take this you clanker-lover!!!
Sentry: Dang it!! They got me zeroed!!
Daro: Get ready you backstabing grunt...
Daro: Keep me covered!!
Di'kutt: Roger that.
Sentry: *gasp*
Daro: Now you die you nerfherder... (kills sentry with single bolt to the head)
Di'kutt: Nice shot.
Daro: Bloody right . Lets continue.
Di'kutt: There it is..
Daro: All that for that piece of crap?!? wow..
Di'kutt: That pice of "crap" just won the Republic the battle plans for the CIS in the next month..
Daro: Oh.... so that means for Tinny bashing?
Di'kutt: Yes more tinnie bashing..
Daro: AWESOME!!!!
Di'kutt:... But I do have better things to do than wait for an officer to come pick this thing up...
Daro: There he is...
Di'kutt: About bloody time also...
Daro: Hey look!! It's Echo!
Leuitenant Echo: I am VERY happy that you guys found this thing. You just saved the lives of countless clones...
Di'kutt. The mission always comes first, and this was top importance, thats why we got sent ,right Daro!?!
Daro: Oh, yeah. I just want a bath and some hot food. And a bed if that is possible.
Echo: Oh , your gonna get ALOT more than that. Congratulations ELITE commandos!!
Di'kutt: what?
Echo: you have just done the Republic a great deed. And command found it necessary to promote you.
Daro: sweet.. can we go now?
Echo: sure Jwe can wait for the larty here.
THE END!
This is the battlefield
this is the objective
RATE AND COMMENT!!!
RATE AND COMMENT!!!
RATE AND COMMENT!!!
THANK YOU!!!
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March 4, 2010 |
the comic is quite good and your custome clones are fantastic |
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I like it |
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October 14, 2009 |
i like those helmets what did u do |
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I like it |
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August 10, 2009 |
very nice!!! i love the commandos!!! |
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I like it |
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July 28, 2009 |
Cool comic. I like the action and the very well made commandos. It's a lot better than other Clone Wars comics I've seen. |
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I like it |
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July 28, 2009 |
Nice stuff, great story line, yeah you're getting better... BTW thanks for the nice comment, and sure we can keep on touch... see you soon :) peace.. Firas |
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I like it |
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July 28, 2009 |
I'd love to chat but I have to go now, maybe some other time. :) |
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I like it |
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July 28, 2009 |
Hey, it was pretty long but the story was pretty easy to follow. Next time, maybe you could introduce the setting a little better but nice job and keep MOCing! |
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Very cool. I like the helmet paintjobs the best. tho i would suggest u might want to change the swearing (tho it added to the effect of the comic) to stuff like "eat this, nerf fodder! or "SUCK LAZER! just stufs like that but oerall very cool. |
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I made it |
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July 25, 2009 |
Quoting Fell Skyhawk
Nice,love the blue visor.
Thanks. Check out some of my other creations yoiu might like them. |
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I like it |
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July 24, 2009 |
Nice,love the blue visor. |
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