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Ok, so you want honest opinions? This is the thread to do it in. Here's how this is going to work.

Leave a link here to the MOC you want people to look at. Don't expect comments on your moc from "name" builders or anyone else for that matter. I can't promise that anyone will look at it, but this is the thread to do it in.

If you want honest feedback, be ready for it. Some people are nice about it... and some, well... aren't. Don't come crying to me if you get your feelings hurt.

Arguments will not be tolerated. If you post your link here and someone says that they don't like it for any reason, that's their opinion and you asked for it. Remember that.


Alright, post em!
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| January 2, 2010, 7:54 pm
Here are two of mine

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176158


http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176429

Please if you want to look and give your honest opinion. =P
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| January 2, 2010, 7:57 pm
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Quoting Phazezorz .
Was that a rip, Phipson?
I jest, I jest.

If you could, please
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/169846
I have touched it slightly here and there, but I haven't got around to posting it.

Brutally honest opinon, please.


Of course it was! HAHAHA

Seriously though, I can't even see your post... no, I'm not kidding. You see, I do 90% of my MOCpages (and internet in general) stuff from my work computer in between beating up suspects. My work computer has a number of sights blocked for whatever reason... Flickr happens to be one of those sites that is blocked from my computer. When you upload your pics through flickr, I'm unable to see them. So I am actually unable to see what your post is and therefor cannot (whether I'd like to or not) give any opinion on it. Wish I could. Sorry.

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| January 2, 2010, 8:04 pm
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I already commented on your first one:
"Well, I don't see any REAL problem with your photo skills, but even if being a photographer isn't in your future, being a Lego builder IS! This is a really nice piece of work! Great job! (oh, I suppose I should moderate your comment now so that people know what I'm talking about huh?) Keep it blocky! ~ Chris."

And the second one... I saw that earlier and didn't leave a comment on purpose (nothing against you there by the way) Let's just say that you may have a point in a way, but... do you really want me to get into it?
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| January 2, 2010, 8:10 pm
Apparently phonebooks are the best suspect beating tools, as they don't leave bruises.

Worth remembering, I was thinking of the Army myself, but you never know when a little low-key discouragement could be handy.
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| January 2, 2010, 8:11 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson

but... do you really want me to get into it?

No, not really.
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| January 2, 2010, 8:20 pm
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Quoting Jake H.
No, not really.


Probably a good idea. Let's just say that I have NOTHING against kids customizing clones... just build a moc around them. From there, we can agree to disagree and move forward.
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| January 2, 2010, 8:44 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson

Probably a good idea. Let's just say that I have NOTHING against kids customizing clones... just build a moc around them. From there, we can agree to disagree and move forward.

Master Luc does not like you saying the kids and teens that customize clones have to build something around them, they do not like it they are true artists I support them fully!
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| January 2, 2010, 8:49 pm
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Quoting Phazezorz .
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/169846

This should work, now. I re-routed the pics using the MP downloader, one at a time, so as to avoid frustration.


Ok, here it goes.

The build is solid, no problems there. Your play features, whether they work or not, are a great addition. I know we always talk about the devil being in the details and to add more background detail to every moc... but for my eye, the background on this was just a little too busy. It distracted from the vehicle and I found it hard to focus on what was what.

Other than that, like I said, a solid build.
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| January 2, 2010, 8:52 pm
Quoting Matthew Novosad

*facepalm*
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| January 2, 2010, 8:53 pm
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Agreed...


*facepalm*
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| January 2, 2010, 8:54 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson
Agreed...


*facepalm*


OK I'm risking my life and asking you to look at this and giving me your opinion. Don't fear, no flickr stuff on here. http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176460
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| January 2, 2010, 8:57 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson
Agreed...


*facepalm*


*facechair*
*facedesk*

http://i.cr3ation.co.uk/dl/s1/jpg/facepalm.jpg
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| January 2, 2010, 9:00 pm
Here's my personnel favorite Sci-Fi MOC that I still have built and plan on making a V2 of so have at it.
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/168406
The more 'truthful' the better!
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| January 2, 2010, 9:06 pm
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Quoting Joseph Phillips
http://mocpages.com/moc.php/175816


I like the simple tree and bench design. The one thing that confused me was what are the clear cheese slopes supposed to be? From what I can tell, the memorial is on grass. Why add the clear Cheese? It kinda distracted me from the rest of the moc. But overall, not bad.
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| January 2, 2010, 9:07 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson

I like the simple tree and bench design. The one thing that confused me was what are the clear cheese slopes supposed to be? From what I can tell, the memorial is on grass. Why add the clear Cheese? It kinda distracted me from the rest of the moc. But overall, not bad.


Hey Mr. Phipson did you see mine yet? :) http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176460
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| January 2, 2010, 9:08 pm
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Quoting Jake H.
Here's my personnel favorite Sci-Fi MOC that I still have built and plan on making a V2 of so have at it.
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/168406
The more 'truthful' the better!


Now that is truly outragous! (anyone get that joke? You'd have to be at least in your late 20s...)

Anyway, that is a very solid build. I'm not seeing anything that NEEDS improvement. Unless you can figure out some way to make the SNOT wings a bit smoother. They just had a kinda... blocky look to them. Other than that, nice work! If you're looking for additions, maybe see what you can do about adding an engine to the back. Maybe something in bley...
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| January 2, 2010, 9:11 pm
GAH Chris don't ignore me! Whats wrong with me that you ignore me.... let me think... I KNOW, you are mad at me for changing my name from "Commander Flare" to something less clone-wars-ey. Thats it! :P

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176460 !!!!!
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| January 2, 2010, 9:13 pm
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Quoting Rustiiko B-16

Hey Mr. Phipson did you see mine yet? :) http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176460


Yes I did... and I'm still trying to get over the motion sickness from trying to look at the details on a moving picture. After I'm done throwing up (from the motion sickness that is, your moc looks good) I'll get back to you...

basically, what that means is: I liked the over all look of the moc, but trying to be "different" and "cool" by putting your moc on a scrolling picture frame... WAY too distracting. Again, just my opinion.
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| January 2, 2010, 9:16 pm
Thanks Chris, that definitely helped me out a lot.
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| January 2, 2010, 9:16 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson

Yes I did... and I'm still trying to get over the motion sickness from trying to look at the details on a moving picture. After I'm done throwing up (from the motion sickness that is, your moc looks good) I'll get back to you...

basically, what that means is: I liked the over all look of the moc, but trying to be "different" and "cool" by putting your moc on a scrolling picture frame... WAY too distracting. Again, just my opinion.


OK well I thought that would be cool... anyways I changed it if you are interested, no moving pix!
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| January 2, 2010, 9:18 pm
Quoting Phazezorz .
now, onward, I ride- To MOTD!--



Over my dead body will you get one before me.

Bitter powers, activate!

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| January 2, 2010, 9:19 pm
Quoting Tom R.
Dude, sit back, take a chill pill and wait patiently.


Sure, as long as the chill pill has an orangey flavor... I love oranges...
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| January 2, 2010, 9:19 pm
http://mocpages.com/moc.php/175397

Here goes.
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| January 2, 2010, 9:21 pm
Quoting Phazezorz .
My Mocing levels are over 9000!

What?! OVER 9000!!!


There's no way that can be right!

Because my MOCing levels AND story telling levels are OVER 9000!

Other than that, I don't have much to contribute to this conversation.
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| January 2, 2010, 9:22 pm
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Quoting Lt. John Harland
http://mocpages.com/moc.php/175397

Here goes.


You don't get one till you answer to your claim of having over 1 million bricks from the "how many" thread. We've been waiting for you guys that talked the talk to walk the walk.

In case you missed it, my collection is in the range of 55 to 65,000 after PAB is included. So let's see what 940,000 more bricks looks like!

Remember... I like being proved wrong.
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| January 2, 2010, 9:24 pm
My first studless MOC. Please don't hate me for it being Star Wars :)http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176464
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| January 2, 2010, 9:24 pm
Hey Chris could you please look at mine? I would really like to know your opinion on both of those.
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| January 2, 2010, 9:25 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson

You don't get one till you answer to your claim of having over 1 million bricks from the "how many" thread. We've been waiting for you guys that talked the talk to walk the walk.

In case you missed it, my collection is in the range of 55 to 65,000 after PAB is included. So let's see what 940,000 more bricks looks like!

Remember... I like being proved wrong.



The only person I think could ever have 1 million bricks that actually bothers to post stuff on MOCpages is either Sean Kenney or Arthur Guigick (I think I spelled that right).
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| January 2, 2010, 9:30 pm
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Quoting Josh B.
My first studless MOC. Please don't hate me for it being Star Wars :)http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176464


Star Wars doesn't bother me in the slightest. Why people think that is beyond me. Heck, I'll bet I know more about Star Wars than most of you guys. (current clone wars cartoon series excluded, I only just picked up the DVD set recently and am still working on it.)

Moving on, Your concept isn't bad at all. Here's what I would have liked to have seen. More floor space. Sounds simple, but the small size in conjuction with how much "action" is going on is not a good ratio. Now, I'm assuming you don't have a lot of brick to work with, but here's an idea. Try building a SNOT floor to put your action on. And remember, SNOT doesn't mean tiled... but from how your request was worded, I'm pretty sure you know that.

In short, good concept, not bad on the build itself... needs more space.
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| January 2, 2010, 10:23 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson

Star Wars doesn't bother me in the slightest. Why people think that is beyond me. Heck, I'll bet I know more about Star Wars than most of you guys. (current clone wars cartoon series excluded, I only just picked up the DVD set recently and am still working on it.)

Moving on, Your concept isn't bad at all. Here's what I would have liked to have seen. More floor space. Sounds simple, but the small size in conjuction with how much "action" is going on is not a good ratio. Now, I'm assuming you don't have a lot of brick to work with, but here's an idea. Try building a SNOT floor to put your action on. And remember, SNOT doesn't mean tiled... but from how your request was worded, I'm pretty sure you know that.

In short, good concept, not bad on the build itself... needs more space.

OK, thank you for taking the time to look at it- I will take your advice for making a SNOT MOC!
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| January 2, 2010, 10:25 pm
Please look at mine.
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| January 2, 2010, 10:29 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson
Ok, so you want honest opinions? This is the thread to do it in. Here's how this is going to work.

Leave a link here to the MOC you want people to look at. Don't expect comments on your moc from "name" builders or anyone else for that matter. I can't promise that anyone will look at it, but this is the thread to do it in.

If you want honest feedback, be ready for it. Some people are nice about it... and some, well... aren't. Don't come crying to me if you get your feelings hurt.

Arguments will not be tolerated. If you post your link here and someone says that they don't like it for any reason, that's their opinion and you asked for it. Remember that.


Alright, post em!


Oh mostly-powerful, high-ranking, lego-loving Phipson, will you take this MOC into consideration? I changed the moving pix.

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176460
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| January 3, 2010, 9:24 am
Hey Rustiko would you be interested in joining this steampunk group? we're still trying to jump start it. http://www.mocpages.com/group.php/9411
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| January 3, 2010, 9:40 am
Quoting Jake H.
Hey Rustiko would you be interested in joining this steampunk group? we're still trying to jump start it. http://www.mocpages.com/group.php/9411


Shure!
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| January 3, 2010, 10:12 am
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Quoting Rustiiko B-16

Oh mostly-powerful, high-ranking, lego-loving Phipson, will you take this MOC into consideration? I changed the moving pix.

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176460


I know I'm no Phipson (though, I that's what I'm going to be when I grow up!), but I thought I'd jump in on a couple here:

So for starters, great job on the presentation. Clean pics, my favorite kind of background, and nice, even lighting on the MOC.

I think your additional colors are a bit too spread out, which tends to create a sense of visual chaos, or lack of uniformity. Supplimental colors are great in MOCs, but I think they tend to look better when grouped together a little more than what you've got.

Nice job on the form, in general, but I wouldn't mind seeing areas that are smoother, against some areas that are very detailed and busy. Most of the surface area in your creation is pretty busy looking.

One other thing...LOVE the use of the links for the ammo belt.

So there ya be. My .02 for what it's worth. Now Phipson can jump in and contradict me on every point...you know...just because! ;)

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| January 3, 2010, 10:17 am
Quoting Mark Kelso

I know I'm no Phipson (though, I that's what I'm going to be when I grow up!), but I thought I'd jump in on a couple here:

So for starters, great job on the presentation. Clean pics, my favorite kind of background, and nice, even lighting on the MOC.

I think your additional colors are a bit too spread out, which tends to create a sense of visual chaos, or lack of uniformity. Supplimental colors are great in MOCs, but I think they tend to look better when grouped together a little more than what you've got.

Nice job on the form, in general, but I wouldn't mind seeing areas that are smoother, against some areas that are very detailed and busy. Most of the surface area in your creation is pretty busy looking.

One other thing...LOVE the use of the links for the ammo belt.

So there ya be. My .02 for what it's worth. Now Phipson can jump in and contradict me on every point...you know...just because! ;)


Hehe thanks, Mark! :D
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| January 3, 2010, 10:19 am
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Quoting Matthew Novosad
Please look at mine.


Hey, Matthew! Give us a link to the one you want looked at and we'll check it out...or did you just want comments on any of them?

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| January 3, 2010, 10:19 am
Quoting Mark Kelso

Hey, Matthew! Give us a link to the one you want looked at and we'll check it out...or did you just want comments on any of them?

The link(s) are at the top of the page, just look at the first one.
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| January 3, 2010, 10:24 am
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So, I thought I'd have a look at this one...

All in all, very nice work. Love the story telling aspect of it, and it's well written. As I mentioned in the comment on your page, I thought for such a small MOC, the building was done well, too.

While you took pretty good shots, and had some variety of angles, I think you could definitely take it a step farther. When seeing stories, I love to see all kinds of shots...close-ups (just the face, for example), overheads, low-angle shots, etc. Try to really push the different kinds of pics you take, and it can help to tell the story from a visual stand point (close-ups are great for telling emotion, wide angle shots make good narratives, and so on).

I might mention, also, that I thought the shot with him running (early in the story), and the gunner in the distance was excellent. Really loved that image, in particular.

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| January 3, 2010, 10:49 am
c'mon i'll take your best shot! And that means all of you! Even you Phipson, Theres nothing you can do to break my spirit. Nothing!

http://mocpages.com/moc.php/143693

http://mocpages.com/moc.php/150721

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| January 3, 2010, 3:31 pm
Here is one

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176158


GIVE IT YOUR ALL YOU ARE NOT BREAKING MY SPIRIT!! Muhahahahahahahahahaha!
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| January 3, 2010, 3:53 pm
No one has commented on this yet: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176515
If you wish to be a part of the comic please join this group:http://www.mocpages.com/group.php/9629
Thank you
~Josh
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| January 3, 2010, 4:17 pm
Well, I'd like an opinion on this: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/171575 I know my pictures and lighting are poor, but I spent a while on the actual build and would like to know what to improve on for my next Castle creation.
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| January 3, 2010, 5:37 pm
Quoting Rusty S.
Well, I'd like an opinion on this: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/171575 I know my pictures and lighting are poor, but I spent a while on the actual build and would like to know what to improve on for my next Castle creation.

It is really good! The only thing that I think needs a little improving on is actually the monster- he seems a little bit stiff and blocky. You should try putting him in a menacing pose or something. But your castle building skills are great!
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| January 3, 2010, 5:46 pm
This is my Custom Truck Racing Version...

http://mocpages.com/moc.php/175204

I have some questions. I was expecting atleast 10 more I like its from today (That would make 15...). I was a little confused why. But I thought about and it looks TOO much like a V2 of the first one. But If you haven't noticed it's fully rebuilt. Any suggestions on fixing it? Oh, and I also want an honest opinion please... Thanks!
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| January 3, 2010, 6:13 pm
I know I'm a doubledipper...

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176627
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| January 3, 2010, 6:25 pm
Quoting Matthew Novosad
Here is one

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176158


GIVE IT YOUR ALL YOU ARE NOT BREAKING MY SPIRIT!! Muhahahahahahahahahaha!

Hello?
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| January 3, 2010, 6:31 pm
Quoting Matthew Novosad
Hello?

fine...
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| January 3, 2010, 6:34 pm
Quoting Joe P.
fine...

Thank you. =P
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| January 3, 2010, 6:36 pm
Quoting Matthew Novosad
Thank you. =P

Yup! :)
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| January 3, 2010, 6:37 pm
here is one im curious about thanks haha.

http://mocpages.com/moc.php/162431
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| January 3, 2010, 6:42 pm
heres mine

<a href=http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176566 </a>
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| January 3, 2010, 6:42 pm
Quoting Mark Kelso

So, I thought I'd have a look at this one...

All in all, very nice work. Love the story telling aspect of it, and it's well written. As I mentioned in the comment on your page, I thought for such a small MOC, the building was done well, too.

While you took pretty good shots, and had some variety of angles, I think you could definitely take it a step farther. When seeing stories, I love to see all kinds of shots...close-ups (just the face, for example), overheads, low-angle shots, etc. Try to really push the different kinds of pics you take, and it can help to tell the story from a visual stand point (close-ups are great for telling emotion, wide angle shots make good narratives, and so on).

I might mention, also, that I thought the shot with him running (early in the story), and the gunner in the distance was excellent. Really loved that image, in particular.

Thank you, for the next part I'll try close ups of the face, and overhead shots like you suggested;)
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| January 3, 2010, 7:02 pm
Quoting Josh B.
It is really good! The only thing that I think needs a little improving on is actually the monster- he seems a little bit stiff and blocky. You should try putting him in a menacing pose or something. But your castle building skills are great!

Thanks, but I was more wondering about the castle building improvements, not so much the monster. Still, I appreciate the advice.
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| January 3, 2010, 8:54 pm
Here could you please look at it?
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176158

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| January 4, 2010, 8:47 pm
Quoting Rustiiko B-16


The only person I think could ever have 1 million bricks that actually bothers to post stuff on MOCpages is either Sean Kenney or Arthur Guigick (I think I spelled that right).

Sean Kenney has 1.25 million according to his website. don't know about Mr. Guigick.
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| January 4, 2010, 9:38 pm
Here I go.... and it is NOTHING compared to you guys... but I thought I would give it a try...
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/177028
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| January 4, 2010, 10:42 pm
Here is one, please look it's a work in progress and a tribute.

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/177350

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| January 6, 2010, 8:40 pm
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Quoting Matthew Novosad
Here is one, please look it's a work in progress and a tribute.

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/177350


Matthew. The first thing that caught my attention here is how nothing in the moc truly goes with anything else. I noticed jet engines on the side of the building?

I'm not trying to be discouraging with this comment, rather to point out where things need to improve. Rather than trying to maximize space with the few bricks you have, you should think about a smaller view and work more on the actual shape of the creation. Spreading out all across the table may make you think you have a huge creation, but the reality is (in an outsiders perspective) that it's just randomly placed bricks on a couple of baseplates.

Work on smaller creations with more uniformity before trying to move on to the "epic" builds.

Hope that helped.
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| January 7, 2010, 7:24 pm
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/176387
Here's one to start with.
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| January 7, 2010, 7:30 pm
Just curious, being a novice and all. How does one create those blue type links?
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| January 7, 2010, 7:38 pm
Quoting robert ball
Just curious, being a novice and all. How does one create those blue type links?


If you want to add it in this comment, just paste the entire URL, i.e., "http://blah blah blah".

In other places, you would need the 'a href' html tag http://www.htmlcodetutorial.com/linking/_A_HREF.html

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| January 7, 2010, 7:59 pm
I will post mine tomorrow....
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| January 7, 2010, 8:15 pm
/begins shameless plug

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/171307

This is one of those little builds that turns out WAY better than expected. It was also a shameless attempt to win prizes over on Flickr.
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| January 7, 2010, 8:26 pm
Quoting Master Shifu Leo J

If you want to add it in this comment, just paste the entire URL, i.e., "http://blah blah blah".

In other places, you would need the 'a href' html tag http://www.htmlcodetutorial.com/linking/_A_HREF.html


Thanks. I'm going to wait until mid-day, though, when I'm awake enough to really concentrate. (I'll have had my usual ten pots of coffee by then and it will be easier.)
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| January 7, 2010, 8:45 pm
sorry, i cant made links on my laptop! but if you are a clone wars fan, check out my base in the folder the clone wars!
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| January 8, 2010, 4:33 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson

Matthew. The first thing that caught my attention here is how nothing in the moc truly goes with anything else. I noticed jet engines on the side of the building?

I'm not trying to be discouraging with this comment, rather to point out where things need to improve. Rather than trying to maximize space with the few bricks you have, you should think about a smaller view and work more on the actual shape of the creation. Spreading out all across the table may make you think you have a huge creation, but the reality is (in an outsiders perspective) that it's just randomly placed bricks on a couple of baseplates.

Work on smaller creations with more uniformity before trying to move on to the "epic" builds.

Hope that helped.

Thanks, the only complaint I have is that it is a sculpture of a comet not jet a engine. It's a sculpture garden, ancient Egyptian museum thing that is a tribute to Joshua Landry. Nothing is randomly placed either I put a lot of thought into this. and it is 1 32X32 baseplate. Ehh it really was more like three complaints but the last two really don't count.
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| January 8, 2010, 5:50 pm
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/177709
my first comic.
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| January 8, 2010, 5:51 pm
Quoting Matthew Novosad
Thanks, the only complaint I have is that it is a sculpture of a comet not jet a engine. It's a sculpture garden, ancient Egyptian museum thing that is a tribute to Joshua Landry. Nothing is randomly placed either I put a lot of thought into this. and it is 1 32X32 baseplate. Ehh it really was more like three complaints but the last two really don't count.

You can't really have 'complaints' about reviews. Besides, just because their supposed to be something doesn't mean it looks like something. Hope that made since :)
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| January 8, 2010, 5:53 pm
Quoting Jake H.
You can't really have 'complaints' about reviews. Besides, just because their supposed to be something doesn't mean it looks like something. Hope that made since :)

I put in the description that it is a sculpture of a comet.
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| January 8, 2010, 5:57 pm
Quoting Matthew Novosad
I put in the description that it is a sculpture of a comet.

Again, Chris was just saying that you should improve it because he can't tell what it is.
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| January 8, 2010, 6:09 pm
Quoting Jake H.
Again, Chris was just saying that you should improve it because he can't tell what it is.

I'm not trying to argue or anything but if some reads the description (which I am sure Chris did) it clearly states that it is a sculpture of a comet.
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| January 8, 2010, 6:11 pm
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/178043

My steampunk cannon. Constructive criticism please.
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| January 9, 2010, 9:49 pm
Version 2 of my steampunk cannon!

Enjoy and please, please look! =P

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/178336

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| January 10, 2010, 5:42 pm
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Quoting Jake H.
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/177709
my first comic.


I'd love to help you out, but flickr is blocked on my computer. Sorry.
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| January 10, 2010, 5:58 pm
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Quoting J.C. Stewart [5700]
http://mocpages.com/moc.php/158266


I have three words for you. Tripod tripod TRIPOD! The moc, not so bad. I could actually see that basic design being used in something bigger. But we really need to talk about your picture taking. There's a thousand tutorials in the threads here on how to take better pics, but I'll sum them up for you quickly here.

Use something, ANYTHING to steady your camera on when taking the pics. A tripod is the best of course but a book, table, desk, heck, even your leg would help. When your camera's not steady, your pics WILL be blurry. Now, lighting... You could use a desk lamp or what I did was went to home depot and picked up a clamp on light for less than ten bucks. Your next best option is to take the moc outside and take pics in natural light. Many people swear by this method. I've done it a couple of times myself and it works quite well.

Now, background. Something simple you can do, if you can't go with the posterboard that a lot of us use, is to just get a bedsheet (be sure it's ironed) and drape it over a chair or something. This will give you the size you need to give yourself a nice, clean background.

Hope that helped! Good luck!

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| January 10, 2010, 6:05 pm
Quoting Matthew Novosad
Version 2 of my steampunk cannon!

Enjoy and please, please look! =P

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/178336

Please oh please! I need constructive criticism.

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/178336


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| January 10, 2010, 6:11 pm
I could use some constructive criticism here too:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/177946
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| January 10, 2010, 6:14 pm
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The pics are clear and crisp with decent lighting. Good there. The build... not bad at all. Your SNOT technique came together nicely. If I were doing it, I would have taken a couple seconds longer to make sure all the parts were pushed together... but meh, it's not that noticeable.

Oh, but primative weapons VS guns? Sticks and swords will never win... no matter what the Ewoks try to tell you. HAHAHAHAHA (watch that start a whole debate now...)
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| January 10, 2010, 6:20 pm
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Quoting Rakoua SuperSonic
I could use some constructive criticism here too:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/177946


Now that's a sweet little build. Nice clean, clear pics with a clean background. The moc itself was nicely done as well. Just the right amount of detail without going overboard. The whole thing just fell together nicely. Good job!
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| January 10, 2010, 6:26 pm
Quoting Matthew Novosad
Please oh please! I need constructive criticism.

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/178336


Hello? http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/178336

This will be the last begging one.
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| January 10, 2010, 6:28 pm
I prefer the "Ask Keith" groups for constructive criticisms but TWO awesome builders doing nearly the same thing! Awesome.
Here's mine: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/178281

Be brutally honest.
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| January 10, 2010, 6:31 pm
Thanks Phipson!
Here's another one, if anyone's interested:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/162653
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| January 10, 2010, 6:32 pm
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Quoting Nick Shelton
I prefer the "Ask Keith" groups for constructive criticisms but TWO awesome builders doing nearly the same thing! Awesome.
Here's mine: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/178281

Be brutally honest.


Ok... to be brutally honest here... I can't see Flickr pics on my computer. HAHAHAHAHA

Sorry, but it's true. No Flickr for me. Maybe Kelso will see this and be able to give you his two cents.

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| January 10, 2010, 6:53 pm
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Just so you guys know... posting the same link over and over again is a great way to NOT get it reviewed. It's just annoying.
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| January 10, 2010, 6:59 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson
Just so you guys know... posting the same link over and over again is a great way to NOT get it reviewed. It's just annoying.

O.K I will stop that.
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| January 10, 2010, 7:01 pm
Well, here I go. Again. http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/173552 Be as honest as you wish.
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| January 10, 2010, 7:30 pm
Seeing as the last post managed to reel in some unfortunate soul, I guess I'll put up another MOC:
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/178432
Disclaimer: This creation features heavy use of Orkish. It may cause bleeding eyes or loss of limbs.
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| January 11, 2010, 8:23 am
Here are four of mine.
http://mocpages.com/moc.php/177271
http://mocpages.com/moc.php/177395
http://mocpages.com/moc.php/178367

Please give the opinion you think best.
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| January 11, 2010, 8:44 am
Here are mine I like... http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/168274 http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/171467 http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/155362

Critique appreciated. Now critique and have NO MERCY!
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| January 11, 2010, 8:47 am
here is mine http://mocpages.com/moc.php/172715
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| January 13, 2010, 4:37 pm
Seems I can't resist the allure of possible comments...
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/177808

Speaking of which, has anyone found a cure for that particular affliction? If so, post it in the link ;)
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| January 13, 2010, 11:25 pm
Ok, here goes everything... or nothing... or something... or whatever: http://mocpages.com/moc.php/157713. Seriously though, I would rather you tell one thing I can improve, ALONG WITH one thing you liked, that way I know that not everything about it is bad, but I can still improve said thing before I post my final.
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| January 14, 2010, 6:08 pm
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Quoting Architect of Vonthako

Quoting Mark Kelso
I wouldn't mind seeing areas that are smoother


I think that's what Phipson said to your mom...


Ten points to Griffendor!

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| January 15, 2010, 12:08 am
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Quoting Architect of Vonthako
Quoting Mark Kelso
I wouldn't mind seeing areas that are smoother


I think that's what Phipson said to your mom...


Oh, goooood one!


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| January 15, 2010, 8:09 am
My biggest project ever, please look!

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/179092

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| January 15, 2010, 5:47 pm
if you are about to die of boredom, then i am the guy for you! i will put you out of your misery and kill you with this!!!!!
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/175767
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| January 15, 2010, 10:25 pm
I would greatly appreciate if you could give me feedback on my newest MOC:http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/179490
Thank You!
Josh
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| January 16, 2010, 8:23 pm
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Quoting Josh B.
I would greatly appreciate if you could give me feedback on my newest MOC:http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/179490
Thank You!
Josh


The build itself is not bad at all. I can see you put thought into it and didn't just rush through to get "something" posted. I would have liked to have seen some more weaponry on it. It IS a tank after all. But hey, that's just me.

Let's move on to other things shall we? Your picture taking isn't too shabby there. I see you said in the one shot "sorry, I don't know what happened." In cases like that, there's a simple solution. Don't use the shot! As a point of comparison, take my current project. I built a (blank) for a scene and took about 35 pictures of it. In the end, when it's posted, there will only be about 10 shots of it. Why? Because not every shot you take "has" to be posted. When you take the pics (or even as late as when you're posting the moc), go back through them and the one's that don't work or are out of focus or whatever, don't use. Having one less picture of a moc when you already have 10 others never hurt it, but having bad pics of them do.

Finally, (and I see this EVERYWHERE (including some AFOLs pages) and it gets on my nerves like you wouldn't believe) which caption goes with which picture? I figured it out by matching the caption to what was going on, but the fact that I had to take time to "try" to figure it out is the problem. When you upload your moc and write out your description, take about 4 extra seconds and put some space in between each set of pic and caption so that they don't all run together. Everyone has their own ideas about if the caption should go above or below the pic. I don't care either way, I just want to be able to easily tell which it is.

For what it's worth, that's my opinion on your post. Good luck!

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| January 16, 2010, 8:48 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson

The build itself is not bad at all. I can see you put thought into it and didn't just rush through to get "something" posted. I would have liked to have seen some more weaponry on it. It IS a tank after all. But hey, that's just me.

Let's move on to other things shall we? Your picture taking isn't too shabby there. I see you said in the one shot "sorry, I don't know what happened." In cases like that, there's a simple solution. Don't use the shot! As a point of comparison, take my current project. I built a (blank) for a scene and took about 35 pictures of it. In the end, when it's posted, there will only be about 10 shots of it. Why? Because not every shot you take "has" to be posted. When you take the pics (or even as late as when you're posting the moc), go back through them and the one's that don't work or are out of focus or whatever, don't use. Having one less picture of a moc when you already have 10 others never hurt it, but having bad pics of them do.

Finally, (and I see this EVERYWHERE (including some AFOLs pages) and it gets on my nerves like you wouldn't believe) which caption goes with which picture? I figured it out by matching the caption to what was going on, but the fact that I had to take time to "try" to figure it out is the problem. When you upload your moc and write out your description, take about 4 extra seconds and put some space in between each set of pic and caption so that they don't all run together. Everyone has their own ideas about if the caption should go above or below the pic. I don't care either way, I just want to be able to easily tell which it is.

For what it's worth, that's my opinion on your post. Good luck!

Thank you for the advice. I'll remember to take extra pictures, and I'll go fix the text.
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| January 16, 2010, 8:52 pm
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Quoting Matthew Novosad
My biggest project ever, please look!

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/179092


I've told you this before and I'll tell you again young friend. You're trying to build too big for your collection. Don't get me wrong, there's a couple of good points to this moc that I'll get to in a second, but this, like your last build that I looked at, are just too spread out with too many mixed colors.

First, my overall suggestion for you and your building style. If I were you, with the limited number of bricks, I would concentrate on building on a much smaller scale. No bigger than say 16x16 studs at the most. You've got some basic skill so I say nurture that with working on asthetics on a smaller scale before you try to go "epic."

A couple of things that I did like where the cobblestone path. Nicely done with the round studs alternating colors. Then, there was the dirt path and the pond. For those two features however, I'd like you to think about how they look in real life. A pond/river is on a lower level than the ground surrounding it. I know you're using a baseplate under it, but how about either building a higer ground around it that tapers down, or putting the river along the side and placing the baseplate next to it? Same with the pathway. A dirt pathway is trodden down by people passing over it and therefore would be lower than the ground surrounding it.

Don't get discouraged though, I see where you're trying to go with these things. Just don't try to get there overnight. Take a step back and try smaller. One must learn to walk before you can fly. You can't fly into flying.

Good luck! ~ Chris.
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| January 16, 2010, 9:00 pm
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Quoting Arc commander blade
if you are about to die of boredom, then i am the guy for you! i will put you out of your misery and kill you with this!!!!!
http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/175767


I can't see the film from my computer. Perhaps someone else will be able to help you out with this one. Good luck! ~ Chris.
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| January 16, 2010, 9:01 pm
Quoting Chris Phipson

I've told you this before and I'll tell you again young friend. You're trying to build too big for your collection. Don't get me wrong, there's a couple of good points to this moc that I'll get to in a second, but this, like your last build that I looked at, are just too spread out with too many mixed colors.

First, my overall suggestion for you and your building style. If I were you, with the limited number of bricks, I would concentrate on building on a much smaller scale. No bigger than say 16x16 studs at the most. You've got some basic skill so I say nurture that with working on asthetics on a smaller scale before you try to go "epic."

A couple of things that I did like where the cobblestone path. Nicely done with the round studs alternating colors. Then, there was the dirt path and the pond. For those two features however, I'd like you to think about how they look in real life. A pond/river is on a lower level than the ground surrounding it. I know you're using a baseplate under it, but how about either building a higer ground around it that tapers down, or putting the river along the side and placing the baseplate next to it? Same with the pathway. A dirt pathway is trodden down by people passing over it and therefore would be lower than the ground surrounding it.

Don't get discouraged though, I see where you're trying to go with these things. Just don't try to get there overnight. Take a step back and try smaller. One must learn to walk before you can fly. You can't fly into flying.

Good luck! ~ Chris.

With comments that long and considering how many people want critique, it'll take you days to review them! :P
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| January 16, 2010, 9:13 pm
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Quoting The Master of Mario
Here's my new one.http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/179197
It's called "The White Stained Rose."


First, please go and read what I said to Josh B. about spacing. I really don't want to repeat the whole thing again.

Let's move on to story telling as this is something that I feel I actually have the ability to comment on.

You're missing a few key components here. Who is speaking at what time? Even if you don't want to give them "names" per se, at least identify them as "person 1" and "Person 2." When you do it that way however, be sure to explain at the begining of the moc who is who. For a good example of how to identify who is talking, check out any of my story mocs. As it's one of my pet peeves when I can't tell who is speaking in a story, I try to be very particular about that.

Now, if you're going to follow it up with the prequel soon like you said in the comments, then you should also state that fact at the end of the moc. This will not only wet the appitite of the reader who wants more, but also give them hope that they'll be able to figure out just who the heck these people were and why what just happened, happened.

It's hard to come up with an original story these days. Heck, even my next project is a rehash of some concept I heard somewhere, so I'm not going to give you a hard time about taking the basic "Romeo and Juliet" concept and putting your own spin on it. What I do think would have been better, would be if the guy didn't kill himself at the end. Why? It opens up so many more story options for future episodes (if you decided to continue with it). Maybe it wasn't just the person that was there at the time that was in on the kill. Why was she killed and why did the one person stay behind after the deed was done? Or if you absolutly HAVE to kill him, does he come back only to find that it was all set up? Of course now you're getting dangerously close to rehashing the plot of "The Crow" but like I said, orignial ideas are so hard to come by these days...

Hope that helped and good luck! ~ Chris.
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| January 16, 2010, 9:17 pm
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