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C&C is always appreciated, don't hold back.

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| May 1, 2012, 2:50 pm
The pictures are ok, but you can do better. You can see all the important detail, but that light seems sort of dim. I bet he would look better in sunlight. I would have started the pics with a long shot, so we could see his whole form right up front. Instead, you open with close ups. Seems like a commercial or a movie trailer. All and all, I guess he is a fine Bionical. I don't think the other Bionicals would pic on him at work or in public. I like the picture of him telling his turret buddy to "Sick em!" Your choice of letter font for the intro pic is odd. The letters seem more like something from a school news letter, than from an introduction to a guy who’s job title is "War Toa of Ice!" Find MEANER COLDER letters. Attack!
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| May 1, 2012, 6:52 pm
Quoting Michael Rutherford
The pictures are ok, but you can do better. You can see all the important detail, but that light seems sort of dim. I bet he would look better in sunlight. I would have started the pics with a long shot, so we could see his whole form right up front. Instead, you open with close ups. Seems like a commercial or a movie trailer. All and all, I guess he is a fine Bionical. I don't think the other Bionicals would pic on him at work or in public. I like the picture of him telling his turret buddy to "Sick em!" Your choice of letter font for the intro pic is odd. The letters seem more like something from a school news letter, than from an introduction to a guy who’s job title is "War Toa of Ice!" Find MEANER COLDER letters. Attack!
I'll keep the picture and lighting in mind but the font, well I had a better choice in mind but it wasn't working at the time so I went with this, not one of my best choices but meh. :P
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| May 1, 2012, 9:14 pm
I really like it!

A very nice looking.



Maybe work on your usage of parts. Pretty inspiring may be the ones from Cody G, like this one: http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/321559

As I'm really not into Bionicles, I can't say much more. Keep trying. Include nice and interesting parts.
And I personally like the usages of wheels, tubes and chains.



Keep building-
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| May 2, 2012, 8:23 am
Quoting Silenthunt Productions
C&C is always appreciated, don't hold back.

link: http://mocpages.com/moc.php/311912

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I don't have much to say, but the chest could use more greebling. Other than that it is great!
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| May 2, 2012, 7:39 pm
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Quoting Silenthunt Productions
C&C is always appreciated, don't hold back.

link: http://mocpages.com/moc.php/311912

:P

Try a white background. Or maybe a black one. I think the model will be hard to see with a white one. But I like the gun and the mask. I havn't seen that one for a while.
Also, the feet are quite flat, try bulking them up a little.
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| May 11, 2012, 11:51 am
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