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 Group admin 
Okay guys, time for a bit of administration.

I see a lot of disorder in what people are saying and doing. So far, we have a good premise and high activity, the only problem is that I don't think everyone has a clear idea of what's going on.

So, this thread will be for the logistics of the story. Not just a Back-of-the-book blurb, but a fully explained Q&A between story overviewers (Myself, Killer Quad, and Shadow Architect, the latter of which I will make Mods, now) and the RPers as a whole. This is just so that everyone understands what's going on (not all the secret plot twists, mind you) and can just have fun writing a coherent story.

Shadow, I think this is your que to elaborate on the main points of this first chapter.
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| May 17, 2012, 8:17 am
Fun Fact: I came up with the original story idea. Why don't I get any credit?
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| May 17, 2012, 4:37 pm
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Quoting Unownrule the disappearing rat-fish
Fun Fact: I came up with the original story idea. Why don't I get any credit?


I never said you didn't, it's just Shadow seemed to really take a liking to developing the story and he's also been a good writer in the past.
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| May 17, 2012, 5:06 pm
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Thank you. I need this.

Basically, more or less at the beginning of the chapter, the object(the Foreshadow) crashes into one of Spherus Magna's poles. Whether the Bhakari survivors come down in an escape pod in the debris field around the crash site or are in the ship when it's hit, it debatable. Could be both.

Anywhat, the Order formulates a recon mission to the pole, under the pretence of looking for survivors. All Artahkha really wants is a look at their tech.

When the recon team arrives, there's a bit of a communication problem, some violence, and then something (Want to hear yor ideas on this) brings the GBs to SM, and with them , the end of chapter one.

I think the main sources of confusion are:

The roles of each character,

The number of chs. each person has,

and the fact the Killer. Q jumped the gun a bit and posted the new story thread without consulting everyone else over the name.

What I DON'T want is to have a really ridgid storyline-and that's why I gave various parts to varous people and left bits open for them.

4 yer info:

Myself-Ghaile, Commander-General of the recon team,

Vulcan-J'kral(aa?), Captain(?) of the Bhakari crew,

and Ben-Valces, Flight Commander of the GBs.


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| May 18, 2012, 11:10 am
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So, I find this to be a good rule of thumb before jumping into a Role Play is to have a strong introduction to primary player characters, lightly touching on their roles, but not getting to deep into it or their past. Kind of like writing a book. It's also nice if you can make each post a bit lengthy, say, three to four full sentences and run it through spell check. Proper grammar, unless part of the character, is also a preferred aspect.
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| May 18, 2012, 4:01 pm
Got a question. Will any of the other Bhakarians live? Or will it be just three vs. all of the Great Beings?
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| May 18, 2012, 10:06 pm
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
Got a question. Will any of the other Bhakarians live? Or will it be just three vs. all of the Great Beings?


Well, it's not just the three of them. About...fifty of the Bhakari survive the crash. The GB ship that lands contains roughly the same amount, with backup hanging in space.

Whetther they survive or not is to be decided. I have a little surprise in store for each of the factions, which will liven the story as it progresses.
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| May 19, 2012, 7:08 am
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Here's Ghaile;
http://shadow-architect.deviantart.com/#/d503v37
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| May 19, 2012, 1:38 pm
Quoting Shadow Architect

Well, it's not just the three of them. About...fifty of the Bhakari survive the crash. The GB ship that lands contains roughly the same amount, with backup hanging in space.

Whether they survive or not is to be decided. I have a little surprise in store for each of the factions, which will liven the story as it progresses.

Wonderful. I'll add some dialogue to my next post that can make things clearer as to where the Bhakarians are.
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| May 20, 2012, 1:11 pm
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
Wonderful. I'll add some dialogue to my next post that can make things clearer as to where the Bhakarians are.


Yeah...I'm debating whether it might be a good idea to delete all the comments in that thread, and start anew.

If Ben doesn't mind.
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| May 20, 2012, 2:32 pm
Quoting Shadow Architect

Yeah...I'm debating whether it might be a good idea to delete all the comments in that thread, and start anew.

If Ben doesn't mind.

Hmmm... I guess I'm fine with it.

Also, Ghaile looks absolutely fantastic.

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| May 20, 2012, 6:42 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect

Yeah...I'm debating whether it might be a good idea to delete all the comments in that thread, and start anew.

If Ben doesn't mind.

Go for it.
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| May 21, 2012, 5:28 pm
Also wondering, what happened to Killer Q?
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| May 21, 2012, 6:48 pm
If we're going to redo the current story, we should also have a proper voting session for the name. Anyone got ideas?
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| May 21, 2012, 9:19 pm
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
Also wondering, what happened to Killer Q?


Judging from a comment on this:http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/296927 (at the bottom), I'd say Ben's probably made a mistake in promoting him...
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| May 22, 2012, 2:11 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect

Judging from a comment on this:http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/296927 (at the bottom), I'd say Ben's probably made a mistake in promoting him...


I think so... I did it all off of my phone and there may have been a slip between "Mod" and "Ban"...

I reinvited him but I haven't had any further contact with Quad, so I don't know if he's able to get back in, yet...
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| May 22, 2012, 2:16 pm
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Ok. The thread's clear now.

Hope y'don't mind, Ben.
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| May 22, 2012, 2:25 pm
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Quoting Baron Von Ben ~

I think so... I did it all off of my phone and there may have been a slip between "Mod" and "Ban"...

I reinvited him but I haven't had any further contact with Quad, so I don't know if he's able to get back in, yet...

...And the Powah Armor Smith returns! I hadn't check'd in for awhile, sorry.
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| May 22, 2012, 6:01 pm
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
If we're going to redo the current story, we should also have a proper voting session for the name. Anyone got ideas?

Names proposed so far:

When the Gods Fall-Unownrule
They Came For the Conquest-Me
The Price of Peace-Architect

Naturally, we could pick an even better name...
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| May 22, 2012, 6:08 pm
Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
Names proposed so far:

When the Gods Fall-Vulcan
They Came For the Conquest-Me
The Price of Peace-Architect

Naturally, we could pick an even better name...

I don't remember saying that. I'd probably make a joke of it by saying "when the gods trip"
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| May 22, 2012, 6:11 pm
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Quoting vulcan the volcano lord
I don't remember saying that. I'd probably make a joke of it by saying "when the gods trip"

Hmm, I may have look for that.
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| May 22, 2012, 6:15 pm
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Quoting vulcan the volcano lord
I don't remember saying that. I'd probably make a joke of it by saying "when the gods trip"

Oh, my bad. It was Unownrule who suggested that. E-E-Edit!
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| May 22, 2012, 6:56 pm
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I've decided to keep Mabtren.
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| May 23, 2012, 9:58 am
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Ok.

We have two options: We can use the TCfC thread,disregarding any consensus over the title,

Or we can consider various names, narrow down to two, and create a new thread. The title for the old thread can go on the group's homepage under the heading "Unused titles", as someone's going to make a story at some point that fits that title.

Now if we go for the second option(which seems the general view) it might be a good idea to instead of just giving an idea, give a explaination of how that is a suitable title and how it fits in.

Eg, The Price of Peace
When caught up in war, how far is each side, and those caught in between prepared to go to achieve peace?

Oh, and please choose yer chs. now. No more than TWO per person.
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| May 23, 2012, 11:25 am
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I gotta get in on the aliens. I love inhuman things x3. as for the second character, Still going to bring Ronin back for this story. Probably going to have him be security for the rescue/research teams.
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| May 23, 2012, 12:32 pm
I'm gonna just use Kor. I've been thinking through some interesting stuff I could do with him to make him more than just an archetype. In other, less fortunate news I will be gone for the next three weeks. :( but in the middle of those three weeks I'll be at a magical place called LegoLand. :)
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| May 23, 2012, 1:22 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect
Ok.

We have two options: We can use the TCfC thread,disregarding any consensus over the title,

Or we can consider various names, narrow down to two, and create a new thread. The title for the old thread can go on the group's homepage under the heading "Unused titles", as someone's going to make a story at some point that fits that title.

Now if we go for the second option(which seems the general view) it might be a good idea to instead of just giving an idea, give a explaination of how that is a suitable title and how it fits in.

Eg, The Price of Peace
When caught up in war, how far is each side, and those caught in between prepared to go to achieve peace?

Oh, and please choose yer chs. now. No more than TWO per person.

Argh... Fine, I'll be rid of Mabtren. -sigh-...

As for naming, I have a new, fresh idea...

"Gods or Devils?"

Whaddya think??
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| May 23, 2012, 1:56 pm
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Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
Argh... Fine, I'll be rid of Mabtren. -sigh-...

As for naming, I have a new, fresh idea...

"Gods or Devils?"

Whaddya think??


Elaborate on WHY that title.

And having no character in the recon team is going to make your job...difficult, since Merinilas(is that right?) won't appear til the second chapter,and D'mrali halfway thru the first. There won't be massive changes in the location, otherhows it'll get VERY confusing. Probably we'll do a couple of introductory posts, 'tween twenty and thirty on the recon, ten? on the aliens again until the recon team arrives.

I'm tempted to say no more Bhakari on the crashed ship, since I'm detecting a race spam.
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| May 23, 2012, 2:10 pm
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Quoting Gideon Creator of... Stuff
I gotta get in on the aliens. I love inhuman things x3. as for the second character, Still going to bring Ronin back for this story. Probably going to have him be security for the rescue/research teams.


Yeah, we kinda need more GBs.

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| May 23, 2012, 2:11 pm
Well, I guess I can get rid of Amalcrus.
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| May 23, 2012, 4:25 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect

Elaborate on WHY that title.

And having no character in the recon team is going to make your job...difficult, since Merinilas(is that right?) won't appear til the second chapter,and D'mrali halfway thru the first. There won't be massive changes in the location, otherhows it'll get VERY confusing. Probably we'll do a couple of introductory posts, 'tween twenty and thirty on the recon, ten? on the aliens again until the recon team arrives.

I'm tempted to say no more Bhakari on the crashed ship, since I'm detecting a race spam.

Title; Nobody is sure if the GBs and Bhakarians are Gods or Devils.

It was a tough choice, but both D'mrali and Merinalas are core char.'s. And 'sides, We have 3 adventures goin' on, what can go wrong?
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| May 23, 2012, 4:36 pm
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As far as I know(feel free to correct me on this), I'm preety sure that Merinalas is CO of the Aurora, reciving orders from Valces, from command ship Vanguard. I'm not sure.
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| May 23, 2012, 4:41 pm
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
Well, I guess I can get rid of Amalcrus.


Nooo, I liked Amalcrus...he was gonna be important...

Now we've only got three people for the Rescue team. THREE!

So. We needeth more people for the Recon Team...
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| May 23, 2012, 4:42 pm
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NO.

We cannot have three adventures going on at once. That would be past confusing, up into catastrophic. Two would be pushing it. Three would be impossible to co-ordinate.
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| May 23, 2012, 4:52 pm
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Hmmm...

Ok. Rolecall. Who's who?

D'mrali_Bhakari
Na'vesh_Bhakari
J'krala_Bhakari

Merinialas_GB
Valces_GB
Kyrinz_GB

Kor _Agori
Ghaile_Skrall
Ronin_Skrall

Enias_Makuta

'Sopse we've got enough people. What about yer ch, Ben?
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| May 23, 2012, 4:55 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect
Hmmm...

Ok. Rolecall. Who's who?

D'mrali_Bhakari
Na'vesh_Bhakari
J'krala_Bhakari

Merinialas_GB
Valces_GB
Kyrinz_GB

Kor _Agori
Ghaile_Skrall
Ronin_Skrall

Enias_Makuta

'Sopse we've got enough people. What about yer ch, Ben?

I threw in a Bhakarian since I only had Ronin, but I don't think that'll be much of a problem.
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| May 23, 2012, 6:10 pm
Quoting Shadow Architect

Nooo, I liked Amalcrus...he was gonna be important...

Now we've only got three people for the Rescue team. THREE!

So. We needeth more people for the Recon Team...

Well, I can't get rid of Kyrinz, as we desperately need GBs, and I really really like Na'vesh.

I could keep Amalcrus, and he could die early on in the war...

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| May 23, 2012, 7:19 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect
Hmmm...

Ok. Rolecall. Who's who?

D'mrali_Bhakari
Na'vesh_Bhakari
J'krala_Bhakari

Merinialas_GB
Valces_GB
Kyrinz_GB

Kor _Agori
Ghaile_Skrall
Ronin_Skrall

Enias_Makuta

'Sopse we've got enough people. What about yer ch, Ben?


I'm here, even if you don't hear from me. And as for a second character, I think we need ourselves a good old fashioned Matoran!

Name: Iiko (ee-ko)
Race: Ko-Matoran
Kanohi: Kaukau (Powerless)
Occupation: Doctor (Military-trained)
Bio:
Iiko was trained as a war medic during the Reign of Terror, but continued his medical expertise after Makuta Teridex's defeat. He opened a clinic for the benefit of Matoran and Agori alike. His skilled medical and military knowledge, not to mention resistance to the cold, made him a perfect canidate for the recon mission to the pole.

There, now I have a character on the team, too.

And as for the idea about 3 simultaneous 'missions,' it could just be set as chapters, differing only by point of view: first the Recon team, then the GBs, then the Bhakarians, or whatever other order.
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| May 23, 2012, 7:37 pm
Quoting Baron Von Ben ~

I'm here, even if you don't hear from me. And as for a second character, I think we need ourselves a good old fashioned Matoran!

Name: Iiko (ee-ko)
Race: Ko-Matoran
Kanohi: Kaukau (Powerless)
Occupation: Doctor (Military-trained)
Bio:
Iiko was trained as a war medic during the Reign of Terror, but continued his medical expertise after Makuta Teridex's defeat. He opened a clinic for the benefit of Matoran and Agori alike. His skilled medical and military knowledge, not to mention resistance to the cold, made him a perfect canidate for the recon mission to the pole.

There, now I have a character on the team, too.

And as for the idea about 3 simultaneous 'missions,' it could just be set as chapters, differing only by point of view: first the Recon team, then the GBs, then the Bhakarians, or whatever other order.

Huzzah for diversity!

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| May 23, 2012, 8:35 pm
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<<<< Updated rolecall



D'mrali_Bhakari (Bhakari plural, Bhakarian singular.)
Na'vesh_Bhakari
J'krala_Bhakari
A'zaiah_Bhakari

Merinialas_GB
Valces_GB
Kyrinz_GB

Kor _Agori(hybridised w/h a GB later on)
Ghaile_Skrall
Ronin_Skrall
Mulciber_Toa
Iiko_Matoran

Enias_Makuta

Seems enough. Akara, are you going to join this...?
I was hoping to see a Vorox, but it doesn't matter that much. We've got decent variation as it is.

Anything else? If not, let's move on the the naming of the thing...


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| May 24, 2012, 10:45 am
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Quoting Baron Von Ben ~
And as for the idea about 3 simultaneous 'missions,' it could just be set as chapters, differing only by point of view: first the Recon team, then the GBs, then the Bhakarians, or whatever other order.

Meh, sounds like another Bota to me. Obviously there is stuff goin' on before the RT arrives.
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| May 24, 2012, 1:46 pm
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Here's another idea-we go back-and-forth between RT and Bhakarians until they meet up, and then we go back-and-forth between Bhakari/Spherius Magnians,and GBs until the Aurora lands. How 'bout that?
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| May 24, 2012, 1:52 pm
I really don't know how I can stress this more but Kor is not just an agori, he's a HYBRID. He could be classified as both GB and agori.
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| May 24, 2012, 3:51 pm
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Time for a list.

1)Sort out the character arrangements:

D'mrali_Bhakari (Bhakari plural, Bhakarian singular.)
Na'vesh_Bhakari
J'krala_Bhakari
A'zaiah_Bhakari

Merinialas_GB
Valces_GB
Kyrinz_GB

Kor _Agori(hybridised w/h a GB later on)
Ghaile_Skrall
Ronin_Skrall
Mulciber_Toa
Iiko_Matoran

Enias_Makuta

I am genuninly considering letting people (aka
Clockhopper and Quads) have another third character for the RC team, BUT after they meet the Gbs they will have to be killed off, to make it fair. Is this allowable, Ben?

2)Finalise story form:

Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
we go back-and-forth between RT and Bhakarians until they meet up


The Gbs won't be spending that much time in space, so won't see them much until they land-the beginning of chapter two.

We'll swap over to the other's point of view once we've got a decent number of posts going that make a decent piece of prose. Doing it too quick would confuse everyone.

So:

First RC team, then Bhakari sit-rep,
Recon team for good number of posts,
Bhakari for good n.o posts,
RC team until they meet up with the Bhakari,
Stuff happens for good n.o posts, chapter one ends with SOMETHING bringing the GBs to SM.

They arrive near the beginning of ch.two

3) Finish the naming of the thing.

Ideas so far:
Price of Peace,
Gods or Devils,
When (the?) Gods Fall

This, I feel, is the last issue we need to address before we can get RPing.







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| May 24, 2012, 4:42 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect
Time for a list.

1)Sort out the character arrangements:

D'mrali_Bhakari (Bhakari plural, Bhakarian singular.)
Na'vesh_Bhakari
J'krala_Bhakari
A'zaiah_Bhakari

Merinialas_GB
Valces_GB
Kyrinz_GB

Kor _Agori(hybridised w/h a GB later on)
Ghaile_Skrall
Ronin_Skrall
Mulciber_Toa
Iiko_Matoran

Enias_Makuta

I am genuninly considering letting people (aka
Clockhopper and Quads) have another third character for the RC team, BUT after they meet the Gbs they will have to be killed off, to make it fair. Is this allowable, Ben?

2)Finalise story form:

Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
we go back-and-forth between RT and Bhakarians until they meet up


The Gbs won't be spending that much time in space, so won't see them much until they land-the beginning of chapter two.

We'll swap over to the other's point of view once we've got a decent number of posts going that make a decent piece of prose. Doing it too quick would confuse everyone.

So:

First RC team, then Bhakari sit-rep,
Recon team for good number of posts,
Bhakari for good n.o posts,
RC team until they meet up with the Bhakari,
Stuff happens for good n.o posts, chapter one ends with SOMETHING bringing the GBs to SM.

They arrive near the beginning of ch.two

3) Finish the naming of the thing.

Ideas so far:
Price of Peace,
Gods or Devils,
When (the?) Gods Fall

This, I feel, is the last issue we need to address before we can get RPing.

1)I would like to have Mabtren back, and if she died,I could care less.

2)As a matter o' fact, I had a plan to delay the landing to ch. 2. You'll see...

3)Voting session?
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| May 25, 2012, 1:32 pm
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I made a Bhakarian that's Red/Black. Vulcan, can I post it as J'krel?
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| May 25, 2012, 1:47 pm
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Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
I made a Bhakarian that's Red/Black. Vulcan, can I post it as J'krel?


That reminds me: Bhakari finalised.

The Bhakari were originally a quite peaceful race, if tribalistic. There were originally fourteen tribes, but the Great Being's actions resulted in the decimation of them. They are typically polymorphic, varying tribe to tribe. Their clothing is also an indication of their tribe. They symbiotically have a hive-mind, an asset that enabled them to survive where others failed.

The most powerful of all the tribes is the twelfth tribe-it mediates the hive-mind. They have no power inherent to them, but they can share the powers of the Bhakari around them. They are often leaders, and can co-ordinate efforts better than most. The other tribes had quite simple powers(eg telekinesis), their proximity to the Blessing (a mysterious interstellar event) some developed elemental powers.

The Great Beings landed on Gaia-T'al for two reasons: The power the Bhakari had, and the technology they were developing. The Great Beings were jealous. Their own society was stagnant, antiquated. They landed on the planet, and eventually their presence and mistreatment of the planet led to the Bhakari warring against them. The Great Beings released a bio-nanorobotic virus, designed to kill. It failed, only allowing the Bhakari develop their own version of the technology and augment them selves for war. They made their own ships, designs taken from the Great Being ones they shot down. They swarmed across their own system, taking it for themselves. The war between them and the Great Beings ravaged across the galaxy, while higher races-the Rakala amongst others-looked on with despair as the war sunk to new depths.

Eventually, they developed a new weapon-Device Tenebrae-yet the Beings discovered it. It was placed aboard the Foreshadow, their fastest ship, and set it on a course to the Magnus system. The crew's minds were wiped of all knowledge of the device.

The ship crashed at Spherus's north pole when it came under fire from the battle craft Aurora. While most of the crew survived, the location of the device is yet unknown.
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| May 25, 2012, 3:23 pm
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Thread title voting booth

Gods or Devils(Quads)
Price of Peace(Me)
When (the?) Gods Fall(Unowrule)

When y've all decided, plz wait for me to start the thread. Otherhoos we'll have another TCfC scene. I hope that's clear.
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| May 25, 2012, 5:21 pm
Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
I made a Bhakarian that's Red/Black. Vulcan, can I post it as J'krel?

yeah you can
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| May 27, 2012, 1:52 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect
Thread title voting booth

Gods or Devils(Quads)

Price of Peace(Me)

When (the?) Gods Fall(Unowrule)

When y've all decided, plz wait for me to start the thread. Otherhoos we'll have another TCfC scene. I hope that's clear.



Votes, then?

Unless anybody's got another idea.
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| May 27, 2012, 3:08 pm
IMPORTANT NOTICE: I will NOT be on mocpages again until friday because of important exams
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| May 27, 2012, 5:21 pm
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I may be finding it difficult to RP from this Saturday to the following Sunday(One week) since I will be going...somewhere else, so,

Ben and Clockhopper, you're now in charge of making sure everyone's one track, etc, it case I can't find a compy while on holiday.


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| May 28, 2012, 2:56 pm
Quoting Shadow Architect
I was hoping to see a Vorox, but it doesn't matter that much. We've got decent variation as it is.


Solution:
Let's turn Amalcrus into a Vorox. He can then go into hiding when the GBs land.
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| May 28, 2012, 3:57 pm
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
Solution:
Let's turn Amalcrus into a Vorox. He can then go into hiding when the GBs land.


^^ Thank you.

Any ideas/votes for the title?
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| May 28, 2012, 4:13 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect
I may be finding it difficult to RP from this Saturday to the following Sunday(One week) since I will be going...somewhere else...

I know, my Memorial Day Weekend was BUSY... why,extended weekend, why?..
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| May 29, 2012, 10:34 am
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
Solution:
Let's turn Amalcrus into a Vorox. He can then go into hiding when the GBs land.

Mmmmmm'kay....

New role call:

Me:
D'mrali-Bhakari
Vralge-Glatoran(Removed eventually)
Merinalas-GB(Commander o' Aurora,taking orders from Capital Ship Vanguard)

Clockhopper:
Rixtus(I think I spelled it right)-Vorox(removed eventually)
Kyrinz-GB
Na'vesh-Bhakari

Vulcan:
J'krel-Bhakari(Moar captinz!)
Mulciber-Toa

S. Architect
Einas-Makuta
Gaile-Skrall

Von Ben:
Valces-GB(Commander of teh Vanguard)
Iiko(Is that how you spell it?)-Matoran

Unownrule:
Kor-Super GB/Agori

Gideon:
Ronin-Skrall
A'ziah-Bhakari

Tell me if I missed anybody.
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| May 29, 2012, 10:43 am
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Quoting Shadow Architect

^^ Thank you.

Any ideas/votes for the title?

VOTE:My idea :P
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| May 29, 2012, 10:45 am
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Quoting Shadow Architect

^^ Thank you.

Any ideas/votes for the title?


I vote Unownrule's idea; "When Gods Fall."
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| May 29, 2012, 10:50 am
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Quoting Baron Von Ben ~

I vote Unownrule's idea; "When Gods Fall."


I *think* that's his title. It might be "When THE Gods Fall".
I'll have to chack whether he minds the new variation.

I'm getting a little desperate to start the new thread before next week, so we'll just have to go with that byyyy....

Friday?
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| May 29, 2012, 1:10 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect

I *think* that's his title. It might be "When THE Gods Fall".
I'll have to chack whether he minds the new variation.

I'm getting a little desperate to start the new thread before next week, so we'll just have to go with that byyyy....

Friday?
Friday? K, sounds good, but remember; the Rat-Fish is at LegoLand. I wonder if he has a smart phone...
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| May 29, 2012, 1:51 pm
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Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
Mmmmmm'kay....

New role call:

Me:
D'mrali-Bhakari
Mabtren-Glatoran(Removed eventually)
Merinalas-GB(Commander o' Aurora,taking orders from Capital Ship Vanguard)

Clockhopper:
Amalcrus-Vorox(May want to change teh name, removed eventually)
Kyrinz-GB
Na'vesh-Bhakari

Vulcan:
J'krel-Bhakari(Moar captinz!)
Mulciber-Toa

S. Architect
Einas-Makuta
Gaile-Skrall

Von Ben:
Valces-GB(Commander of teh Vanguard)
Iiko(Is that how you spell it?)-Matoran

Unownrule:
Kor-Super GB/Agori

Tell me if I missed anybody.

Me. Ronin and A'zaiah.

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| May 29, 2012, 1:56 pm
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Quoting vulcan the volcano lord
yeah you can

Lolz, 1 more thing to add to my tLtP(too lazy to post) list. My page is empty, and camera isn't working. I'll get to it eventually.
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| May 29, 2012, 1:58 pm
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Quoting Gideon Creator of... Stuff
Me. Ronin and A'zaiah.

Oopsies, I'll fix it.
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| May 29, 2012, 1:59 pm
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Do we start from scratch or are our RPs save'd somewere?
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| May 29, 2012, 2:34 pm
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Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
Do we start from scratch or are our RPs save'd somewere?


Start from scratch, je pense. The comments before were a little disorganised.
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| May 29, 2012, 5:06 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect

Start from scratch, je pense. The comments before were a little disorganised.

M'kay, Good to know. What does Je Pense mean?
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| May 29, 2012, 6:08 pm
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More on Merinalas:

Psychological Status; She is a sadistic tyrant, who gets a genuine thrill out of warfare. She also has a Superiority Complex(the obsessive need to show how superior you are) rivaling that of Teridax's. She lives by the phrase"Ends justify the means"

Physical characteristics; She has has had cosmetic surgery many many times, in order to avoid spies and assassins. She now looks similar to Toa Nokama.
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| May 29, 2012, 6:19 pm
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Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
What does Je Pense mean?


French for "I think."
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| May 30, 2012, 10:26 am
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Prepare yourselves for the biggest wall of text
since Harry Potter...

1)Sort out the character arrangements:

D'mrali_Bhakari
Na'vesh_Bhakari
J'krala_Bhakari
A'zaiah_Bhakari

Merinialas_GB
Valces_GB
Kyrinz_GB

Kor _Agori(hybridised w/h a GB later on)
Ghaile_Skrall
Ronin_Skrall
Mulciber_Toa
Iiko_Matoran

Enias_Makuta

Characters whose influence will cease after Ch. One:

Mabtren_Glatorian
Amalcrus(?)_Ice vorox

2)Finalise story form:

Basically, more or less at the beginning of the chapter, the object(the Foreshadow) crashes into one of Spherus Magna's poles. Whether the Bhakari survivors come down in an escape pod in the debris field around the crash site or are in the ship when it's hit, it debatable. Could be both.

Anywhat, the Order formulates a recon mission to the pole, under the pretence of looking for survivors. All Artahkha really wants is a look at their tech.

When the recon team arrives, there's a bit of a communication problem, some violence, and then something (Want to hear yor ideas on this) brings the GBs to SM, and with them , the end of chapter one.

Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
we go back-and-forth between RT and Bhakarians until they meet up


The Gbs won't be spending that much time in space, so won't see them much until they land-the beginning of chapter two.

We'll swap over to the other's point of view once we've got a decent number of posts going that make a decent piece of prose. Doing it too quick would confuse everyone.

So:

Impact scene, pretty short
First RC team, then Bhakari sit-rep,
Recon team for good number of posts,
Bhakari for good n.o posts,
RC team until they meet up with the Bhakari,
Stuff happens for good n.o posts, chapter one ends with SOMETHING bringing the GBs to SM.

They arrive near the beginning of ch.two

3) Finish the naming of the thing.

Currently we're set on Unowrule's idea...

"When Gods Fall"

4) Finalise the Bhakari backstory:

The Bhakari were originally a quite peaceful race, if tribalistic. There were originally fourteen tribes, but the Great Being's actions resulted in the decimation of the last two. They are typically polymorphic, varying tribe to tribe. Their clothing is also an indication of their tribe. They symbiotically have a hive-mind, an asset that enabled them to survive where others failed.

The most powerful of all the tribes is the twelfth tribe-it mediates the hive-mind. They have no power inherent to them, but they can share the powers of the Bhakari around them. They are often leaders, and can co-ordinate efforts better than most. The other tribes had quite simple powers(eg telekinesis), their proximity to the Blessing (a mysterious interstellar event) some developed elemental powers.

The Great Beings landed on Gaia-T'al for two reasons: The power the Bhakari had, and the technology they were developing. The Great Beings were jealous. Their own society was stagnant, antiquated. They landed on the planet, and eventually their presence and mistreatment of the planet led to the Bhakari warring against them. The Great Beings released a bio-nanorobotic virus, designed to kill. It failed, only allowing the Bhakari develop their own version of the technology and augment them selves for war. They made their own ships, designs taken from the Great Being ones they shot down. They swarmed across their own system, taking it for themselves. The war between them and the Great Beings ravaged across the galaxy, while higher races-the Rakala amongst others-looked on with despair as the war sunk to new depths.

Eventually, they developed a new weapon-Device Tenebrae-yet the Beings discovered it. It was placed aboard the Foreshadow, their fastest ship, and set it on a course to the Magnus system. The crew's minds were wiped of all knowledge of the device.

The ship crashed at Spherus's north pole when it came under fire from the battle craft Aurora. While most of the crew survived, the location of the device is yet unknown.

The Great Beings, on seeing the Foreshadow crash on Spherus Magna, believe it's destruction was assured.
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| May 30, 2012, 11:04 am
Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith

Amalcrus-Vorox(May want to change teh name, removed eventually)


Character has been changed. Amalcrus is now...

Name: Rixicus
Gender: Male
Species: Vorox
Element: Sand/Earth
Afflitation: Lawful Good

Rixicus is one of the few Bota Magnian Vorox who decided to intermingle with regular society. He is suspicious by nature, and it is very hard to gain his trust. An eccentric by Vorox standards, he holds a profession as an emergency medic (when there's a severe accident or battle, he's one of the first medics called in). He wields an explosive launcher of Voroxian(?) make, an electrified sword, and a stinger loaded with anesthetic. He was sent to the crash site to look for and give aid to survivors. His suspicions were immediately aroused when he discovered the Bhakarians, and confirmed (for the worse) when the Great Beings landed. He quickly went into hiding, gathering supporters, and founding a secret society that would prepare for the inevitable war. They would emerge when the war started so that the Spherus Magnians wouldn’t get caught by surprise.

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| May 30, 2012, 11:04 pm
Quoting Shadow Architect
4) Finalise the Bhakari backstory:

The Bhakari were originally a quite peaceful race, if tribalistic. There were originally fourteen tribes, but the Great Being's actions resulted in the decimation of the last two. They are typically polymorphic, varying tribe to tribe. Their clothing is also an indication of their tribe. They symbiotically have a hive-mind, an asset that enabled them to survive where others failed.

The most powerful of all the tribes is the twelfth tribe-it mediates the hive-mind. They have no power inherent to them, but they can share the powers of the Bhakari around them. They are often leaders, and can co-ordinate efforts better than most. The other tribes had quite simple powers(eg telekinesis), their proximity to the Blessing (a mysterious interstellar event) some developed elemental powers.

The Great Beings landed on Gaia-T'al for two reasons: The power the Bhakari had, and the technology they were developing. The Great Beings were jealous. Their own society was stagnant, antiquated. They landed on the planet, and eventually their presence and mistreatment of the planet led to the Bhakari warring against them. The Great Beings released a bio-nanorobotic virus, designed to kill. It failed, only allowing the Bhakari develop their own version of the technology and augment them selves for war. They made their own ships, designs taken from the Great Being ones they shot down. They swarmed across their own system, taking it for themselves. The war between them and the Great Beings ravaged across the galaxy, while higher races-the Rakala amongst others-looked on with despair as the war sunk to new depths.

Eventually, they developed a new weapon-Device Tenebrae-yet the Beings discovered it. It was placed aboard the Foreshadow, their fastest ship, and set it on a course to the Magnus system. The crew's minds were wiped of all knowledge of the device.

The ship crashed at Spherus's north pole when it came under fire from the battle craft Aurora. While most of the crew survived, the location of the device is yet unknown.

The Great Beings, on seeing the Foreshadow crash on Spherus Magna, believe it's destruction was assured.

Question: How tall are the Bhakari, in comparison to toa/glatorian and matoran/agori?

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| May 30, 2012, 11:07 pm
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
Question: How tall are the Bhakari, in comparison to toa/glatorian and matoran/agori?


A good head above the average toa.

Right, It looks like we're goin' with Unowrule's "When Gods Fall".

Any objections?
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| May 31, 2012, 11:22 am
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith

Amalcrus-Vorox(May want to change teh name, removed eventually)


Character has been changed. Amalcrus is now...

Name: Rixicus

Mm, note taken.
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| May 31, 2012, 2:18 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect

Yeah...
I'm gonna have to ask you to change that suicide stuff...it's a sensitive subject on the internet.

Oh, my bad.
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| May 31, 2012, 2:19 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect

A good head above the average toa.

Right, It looks like we're goin' with Unowrule's "When Gods Fall".

Any objections?

I'm cool with it. Lolz, the hieght was based on my observation of D'mrali's representative MOC.
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| May 31, 2012, 2:24 pm
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Didn't it say somewheres that I would be promoted? Or do you upper-ranking fellows not want to risk another mistake?
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| May 31, 2012, 6:17 pm
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Friday has arrived. Let the new story commence!

*creates new thread*
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| June 1, 2012, 11:22 am
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Updated list of everything...

1)Sort out the character arrangements:

D'mrali_Bhakari
Na'vesh_Bhakari
J'krala_Bhakari
A'zaiah_Bhakari

Merinialas_GB
Valces_GB
Kyrinz_GB

Kor _Agori(hybridised w/h a GB later on)
Ghaile_Skrall
Ronin_Skrall
Mulciber_Toa
Iiko_Matoran

Enias_Makuta

Characters whose influence will cease after Ch. One:

Vralge_Glatorian
Rixius_Ice (?) vorox

2)Finalise story form:

Basically, more or less at the beginning of the chapter, the object(the Foreshadow) crashes into one of Spherus Magna's poles. Whether the Bhakari survivors come down in an escape pod in the debris field around the crash site or are in the ship when it's hit, it debatable. Could be both.

Anywhat, the Order formulates a recon mission to the pole, under the pretence of looking for survivors. All Artahkha really wants is a look at their tech.

When the recon team arrives, there's a bit of a communication problem, some violence, and then something (Want to hear yor ideas on this) brings the GBs to SM, and with them , the end of chapter one.

Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
we go back-and-forth between RT and Bhakarians until they meet up


The Gbs won't be spending that much time in space, so won't see them much until they land-the beginning of chapter two.

We'll swap over to the other's point of view once we've got a decent number of posts going that make a decent piece of prose. Doing it too quick would confuse everyone.

So:

Impact scene, pretty short
First RC team, then Bhakari sit-rep,
Recon team for good number of posts,
Bhakari for good n.o posts,
RC team until they meet up with the Bhakari,
Stuff happens for good n.o posts, chapter one ends with SOMETHING bringing the GBs to SM.

They arrive near the beginning of ch.two

3) Finish the naming of the thing.

"When Gods Fall"

4) Finalise the Bhakari backstory:

The Bhakari were originally a quite peaceful race, if tribalistic. There were originally fourteen tribes, but the Great Being's actions resulted in the decimation of the last two. They are typically polymorphic, varying tribe to tribe. Their clothing is also an indication of their tribe. They symbiotically have a hive-mind, an asset that enabled them to survive where others failed.

The most powerful of all the tribes is the twelfth tribe-it mediates the hive-mind. They have no power inherent to them, but they can share the powers of the Bhakari around them. They are often leaders, and can co-ordinate efforts better than most. The other tribes had quite simple powers(eg telekinesis), their proximity to the Blessing (a mysterious interstellar event) some developed elemental powers.

The Great Beings landed on Gaia-T'al for two reasons: The power the Bhakari had, and the technology they were developing. The Great Beings were jealous. Their own society was stagnant, antiquated. They landed on the planet, and eventually their presence and mistreatment of the planet led to the Bhakari warring against them. The Great Beings released a bio-nanorobotic virus, designed to kill. It failed, only allowing the Bhakari develop their own version of the technology and augment them selves for war. They made their own ships, designs taken from the Great Being ones they shot down. They swarmed across their own system, taking it for themselves. The war between them and the Great Beings ravaged across the galaxy, while higher races-the Rakala amongst others-looked on with despair as the war sunk to new depths.

Eventually, they developed a new weapon-Device Tenebrae-yet the Beings discovered it. It was placed aboard the Foreshadow, their fastest ship, and set it on a course to the Magnus system. The crew's minds were wiped of all knowledge of the device.

The ship crashed at Spherus's north pole when it came under fire from the battle craft Aurora. While most of the crew survived, the location of the device is yet unknown.

The Great Beings, on seeing the Foreshadow crash on Spherus Magna, believe it's destruction was assured.

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| June 1, 2012, 11:39 am
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Okay, do we have an idea of the basic design/features of the Bhakari's general appearance, and technology they use set in stone anywhere?(Aka, features, height, stance) I plan to make my character my next build.
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| June 13, 2012, 4:15 am
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Their tech is probably going to quite biological-esque, so if your guy's a warrior, then you could give him a wep. arm.

They wear armour that corresponds to their tribe colours, and their skin - I'm not so sure. Let's just say it's browny.

They can be polymorphic, so they can have the same variations humans have (skin colour, stance, etc). The legs are very similar to those of your Rakala, so you shouldn't find that a problem.

I'm not entirely sure about the head - so he can just have a helmet if you want. One to three horns on the head, but again, your choice if they're hidden, etc.

I'm thoroughly looking forward to this.
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| June 13, 2012, 10:31 am
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Quoting Shadow Architect
I'm not entirely sure about the head - so he can just have a helmet if you want. One to three horns on the head, but again, your choice if they're hidden, etc.

Well, if it were me, I would a) use a rakshi head,or b) stick a kiina fin on a basic hand, and use bohrok eyes on the sides. I did that(b) for my own fan-created species.
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| June 13, 2012, 1:34 pm
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Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
Well, if it were me, I would a) use a rakshi head,or b) stick a kiina fin on a basic hand, and use bohrok eyes on the sides. I did that(b) for my own fan-created species.


Just experiment with it.
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| June 13, 2012, 2:10 pm
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Indeed.
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| June 13, 2012, 5:11 pm
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Well, it's more then just for building, it's good to know for a descriptive intro post. Also, someone said a while back they had a zyglak rahkshi hybrid of styles, so wondering if that was still part of the basis? *likes a concrete idea to be established so he gets it right, not one where the design can be taken in many directions*
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| June 15, 2012, 3:08 pm
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Well, this should give you an idea for what one might look like(minus the HF pieces)...

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/328224
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| June 15, 2012, 4:05 pm
Let's just hope there's somebody with a Mask of Translation on the recon team... I assume that the Bhakari don't speak the Magnians' language.
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| June 15, 2012, 4:06 pm
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Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
Well, this should give you an idea for what one might look like(minus the HF pieces)...

http://www.mocpages.com/moc.php/328224



Not really...they have double-jointed legs...

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| June 15, 2012, 5:17 pm
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Quoting Gideon Creator of... Stuff
*likes a concrete idea to be established so he gets it right, not one where the design can be taken in many directions*


Ok, sorry I was vague.

They have double-jointed sapial legs, stand at least a good head above the average toa. They hunch over increasingly as they age, and more horns sprout likewise.

They do, I suppose, look a little like zyglak-though with out the beak. Same design concept, though. Colours rep. tribes, element, etc.

Yeah, just use a rahkshi head.

Brown hides/skin

Eye colour don't matter.
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| June 15, 2012, 5:25 pm
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Quoting Shadow Architect


Not really...they have double-jointed legs...

It was just a very basic idea, and it was my own species. It just looked like a Bhakari to me, with the head and all.
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| June 15, 2012, 5:47 pm
I had an idea; when the shuttle reaches the crash site can there be a bit of a skirmish?
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| June 15, 2012, 6:48 pm
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Quoting Unownrule the disappearing rat-fish (Guess who's back. it's me I'm back. yay).
I had an idea; when the shuttle reaches the crash site can there be a bit of a skirmish?

Naturally.
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| June 16, 2012, 12:56 am
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Quoting Dr. Clockhopper
Let's just hope there's somebody with a Mask of Translation on the recon team... I assume that the Bhakari don't speak the Magnians' language.

I was just thinking that :D!
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| June 16, 2012, 12:58 am
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Quoting Killer Quadrapeds The Power Armor Smith
I was just thinking that :D!


Some of them may not.

Matoran, etc speak the same lang. as the Gbs, so..

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| June 16, 2012, 7:32 am
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Quoting Shadow Architect

Some of them may not.

Matoran, etc speak the same lang. as the Gbs, so..

Wait, but Angonce made a specific programing language to interface w/ the Mata-Nui 'bot and it's inhabitants. Right?
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| June 17, 2012, 10:06 pm
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((Oookay...

There appears to be some confusion as to which ship crashed on the pole. According to Ben's first post, there was a ship called the Forsight as well. We can sort that out later in Story Outline.

At any rate, this is of no immediate importance to the storyline.

Enias: currently mobilising the Recon team for action. He's an Order member himself(he was commander of that outpost at the beginning of ch.1), and knows Ghaile quite well. He was not aware of the recon mission.

Capries: Still in his crater, now battling with D'mrali.

Rixicius: Probably sneaking up behind the Being. Meh.

Bhakari: Following the RT.

Now to sort out the whole ship buisness.

The ship that crashed at the pole was the Foreshadow, of Bhakarian make.

It was shot down by the Great Being ship the Vanguard after it assaulted another Being ship the Forsight and took it's captain, Capries, prisoner, due to it carrying a precious Bhakarian artefact - a map that led to a location on Spherus Magna.

Currently, the Aurora and the Vanguard are in the Spherususian(?)system, and will at some point detect Capries and come to rescue him.

I see little point in arguing over these minor things, but if there are any problems, just ask.))
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| July 15, 2012, 8:30 am
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You guys always get chatty the days I'm doing stuff. Anyhow, in this confusing insanity of other people writing bits for other people's characters, though I suppose it's needed in most cases whether I approve or not, My character's have been lost. A'zaiah is at the actual crash site, rounding up npc survivors, and I was told I needed to wait for them to get there. Now What?

Also, I have to say, I'm not to fond of the whole 'using other people's character's for your little scene' especially if you make them do things out of character. Like having a no nonsense soldier point a rookie in the wrong direction in a vehicle they've been in enough to know where things are.
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| July 15, 2012, 9:21 am
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Quoting Gideon Creator of... Stuff
You guys always get chatty the days I'm doing stuff. Anyhow, in this confusing insanity of other people writing bits for other people's characters, though I suppose it's needed in most cases whether I approve or not, My character's have been lost. A'zaiah is at the actual crash site, rounding up npc survivors, and I was told I needed to wait for them to get there. Now What?

Also, I have to say, I'm not to fond of the whole 'using other people's character's for your little scene' especially if you make them do things out of character. Like having a no nonsense soldier point a rookie in the wrong direction in a vehicle they've been in enough to know where things are.


Yeah... It's probably worse when they do something out of character.

Tho' I've probably done that to someone at some point.

We all have, assumably.

It's quite hard, I suppose, to get a decent form of continuity without doing it at some point. When you're doing a story with as many parts as this one, it becomes fairly confusing if we don't have some over-arching element.
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| July 15, 2012, 9:35 am
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Just for clarification:
Captains of Ships
The Vanguard: Valces

The Aurora:Merinalas

The Foreshadow:J'krel
Leaders
OoMn Recon Team:Ghaile

GBs:Valces

Bhakari:J'krel

Alrighties, that should kinda distinguish the roles of each character.
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| July 16, 2012, 1:16 pm
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